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Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. v. 1
It is sometimes believed that the latest technological developments invariably make employees life simple, while others opine that it is detrimental for them. I personally believe that both positives and negatives for the staffs. On the one hand, some argue that technology brings in adversities for the employees. For instance, robots are taking away the jobs of humans and making their life more troublesome rather than making it easy. This way technology instead of supplementing the efforts of workers it is working as their competitors and making their life hell difficult as these machines can beat humans in speed and accuracy. One the other hand, many consider that latest technology smoothens the working of employees. For example, the innovation of computer worked as a boon for the accountants, it has oversimplified the process of data collection, retrieval and analysis to a great extent and, nowadays, one cannot think routine work on this job without the help of a computer. These way technologies simplify the work of the staff members. Personally, I believe that while technology many sometimes harm workers interest, but it mostly helps them to do work efficiently and effectively. To illustrate, tunnel-digging was once considered a very laborious task but, nowadays, this can be done effortlessly while sitting in an air-conditioned chamber with the help of the latest technology such as automation and robotics. To conclude, although many consider that technology always works as a boon for the workforce, others consider this as a troublemaker for the workers. I personally feel that while it has some negatives, it mostly ameliorates the worker's situation
It is
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sometimes
believed that the latest technological developments
invariably
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make
employees life simple, while others opine that it is detrimental for them. I
personally
believe that both positives and negatives for the staffs.

On the one hand,
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some
argue that
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technology
brings in adversities for the employees.
For instance
, robots are taking away the jobs of humans and making their life more troublesome
rather
than making it easy. This way
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technology
instead
of supplementing the efforts of workers it is working as their competitors and making their life hell difficult as these machines can beat humans in speed and accuracy.

Did you mean "on"?
One
the other hand,
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many
consider that latest
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technology
smoothens the working of employees.
For example
, the innovation of computer worked as a boon for the accountants, it has oversimplified the process of data collection, retrieval and analysis to a great extent and, nowadays, one cannot
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think
routine
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work
on this job without the
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help
of a computer. These way
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technologies
simplify the
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work
of the staff members.

Personally
, I believe that while
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technology
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many
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sometimes
harm workers interest,
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but
it
mostly
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helps
them to do
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work
efficiently
and
effectively
. To illustrate, tunnel-digging was once considered a
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very
laborious task
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but
, nowadays, this can
be done
effortlessly
while sitting in an air-conditioned chamber with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of the latest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
such as automation and robotics.

To conclude
, although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
consider that
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technology
always works as a boon for the workforce, others consider this as a troublemaker for the workers. I
personally
feel that while it has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
negatives, it
mostly
ameliorates the worker's
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situation
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that new technology always improves the lives of workers. Other people believe that it results in disadvantageous for workers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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