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Some people think that money is the best gift to give to young people while others think other types of gifts are better for young people. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people think that money is the best gift to give to young people while others think other types of gifts are better for young people. g5ybD
It is a belief of some individuals that money is the optimal gift for young people, whereas others consider gifts apart from money are the best. However, I percieve that money is the right gift to give to young people. By giving money as a gift in young age could make people lazy. This is because they are getting money for doing nothing and once understood this, they do not go for to make money by their own. As a result, they spend majority of their time at home only for doing nothing. In addition to that, it could harm the society, as young youth stay at home and not helping the community. It is observed in study conducted by university that people are more relactant who gain money by doing nothing rather than people who do execrise to earn money. Hence, some people believe it is not the best gift to give to young people. On the other hand, others believe that money should be given as gift because it could be help them in their education. This is because in present time, universities fees are extremely high and income of regular middle class family is not enough to pay such amount. Therefore, this kind of financial gifts are good enough and provide some extra money backup to the family. India is a classic example of this, where most of the people give gifts to their younger relatives in form of money which help them to get higher education. Thus, I agree with those who believe in giving money in form of gift. To conclude, although a few individuals opiniate that other types of gifts are best rather than money because it leads young youth towards the lazyness, many others and I acknowledge to give money in gift since it could beneficial in their education.
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, whereas others consider
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apart from
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are the best.
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age could
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people
lazy. This is
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because
they are getting
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for doing nothing and once understood this, they do not go for to
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money
by their
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As a result
, they spend
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majority of
their time at home
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only
for doing nothing.
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to that, it could harm the society, as
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youth stay at home and not helping the community. It
is observed
in study conducted by university that
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people
are more
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relactant
who gain
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by doing nothing
rather
than
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people
who do
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execrise
to earn
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money
.
Hence
,
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some
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believe it is not the best
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to
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to
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On the
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hand, others believe that
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should be
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it could be
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help
them in their education. This is
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in present time, universities fees are
extremely
high and income of regular middle
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class
family is not
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enough
to pay such amount.
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, this kind of financial
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are
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good
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enough
and provide
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extra
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backup to the family. India is a classic example of this, where most of the
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people
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give
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gifts
to their younger relatives in form of
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money
which
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help
them to
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get
higher education.
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, I
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agree
with those who believe in giving
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money
in form of gift.

To conclude
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opiniate
that
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other
types of
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are best
rather
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money
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because
it leads
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young
youth towards the
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lazyness
,
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many
others and I acknowledge to
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money
in
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since it
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could beneficial
in their education.
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IELTS essay Some people think that money is the best gift to give to young people while others think other types of gifts are better for young people.

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306 words
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