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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Smacking children is the best form of discipline. QL75K
Physical abuse in children is extremely popular in certain countries around the world. These people think that the best way to educate their children is by slapping them. Although their worrying is understandable, this essay will argue why it is vital for parents to get more informed in regards to the importance of mental health issues and smacking. Strict parents have always thought that their children will grow up to be more independent and intelligent if they force them to do particular things that they show no interest in. It is true that parents want the best for their children. For that reason, parents are constantly worried for their children’s whole being and their only wish is to see them succeed in every aspect of their lives. Some studies have shown that this type of discipline makes children more shy, obedient and more aware of their surroundings. These are characteristics that all parents want their children to have. Other studies have also shown a correlation between problematic adults and parental negligence. Those instances have bolstered existing fears in parents that their children may become mentally damaged if they do not use physical abuse on them. Despite parents’ obvious desire of seeing their children accomplish a lot during their lifetime, it needs to be understood that being physically abusive towards a child will not make him/her more productive in adulthood. Parents’ strict discipline towards their child makes the latter withdraw emotionally from the former and even from their peers. Those children may grow up to be self-conscious about their social skills due to their parents’ criticism, which can lead to poor performance in the workplace. Most of them need therapy in order to perform well not only in the company they work at but also on a daily basis. Self-consciousness and self-doubt are related to depression. There are too many examples of people experiencing clinical depression later in life due to their parents’ mistreatment during a young age. Overall, the idea that one needs to be strict so that his/her child becomes successful is ill-informed and dangerous because it affects the mental health of those innocent children. In conclusion, this essay argued that parents who abuse their children have a flawed understanding of mental illnesses and disorders. It has been proven that this misconception has bad consequences in children’s lives. In my opinion, smacking youngsters is the worst way to educate your child, although it may seem to benefit them during their childhood.
Physical abuse in
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children
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extremely
popular in certain countries around the world. These
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people
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think
that the best way to educate their
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children
is by slapping them. Although their worrying is understandable, this essay will argue why it is vital for
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parents
to
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get
more informed
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
the importance of mental health issues and smacking.

Strict
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parents
have always
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thought
that their
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children
will grow up to be more independent and intelligent if they force them to do particular things that they
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show
no interest in. It is true that
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parents
want the best for their
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children
. For that reason,
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parents
are
constantly
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worried for
their
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children’s
whole being and their
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only
wish is to
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see
them succeed in every aspect of their
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lives
.
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Some
studies have shown that this type of discipline
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makes
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children
more shy, obedient and more aware of their surroundings. These are characteristics that all
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parents
want their
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children
to have. Other studies have
also
shown a correlation between problematic adults and parental negligence. Those instances have bolstered existing fears in
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parents
that their
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children
may become mentally damaged if they do not
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use
physical abuse on them.

Despite
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parents’
obvious desire of seeing their
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children
accomplish a lot during their lifetime, it needs to
be understood
that being
physically
abusive towards a
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child
will not
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make
him/her more productive in adulthood.
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Parents’
strict discipline towards their
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child
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makes
the latter withdraw
emotionally
from the former and even from their peers. Those
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children
may grow up to be self-conscious about their social
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skills
due to their
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parents’
criticism, which can lead to poor performance in the workplace. Most of them need therapy in order to perform well not
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only
in the
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company
they work at
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but
also
on a daily basis. Self-consciousness and self-doubt
are related
to depression. There are too
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many
examples of
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people
experiencing clinical depression later in life due to their
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parents’
mistreatment during a young age.
Overall
, the
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idea
that one needs to be strict
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so
that his/her
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child
becomes successful is ill-informed and
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dangerous
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because
it affects the mental health of those innocent children.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that
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parents
who abuse their
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children
have a flawed understanding of mental illnesses and disorders. It has
been proven
that this misconception has
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bad
consequences in
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children’s
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lives
. In my opinion, smacking youngsters is the worst way to educate your
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child
, although it may seem to benefit them during their childhood.
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IELTS essay Smacking children is the best form of discipline.

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412 words
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