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Some people think that managers alone should take decisions in the company while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that managers alone should take decisions in the company while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process. v. 2
Involvemnet of blue-collar job holders in decision making progress is discussed in modern organizational management. Though full-control of managers over the work-environment is proven method for a firm’s growth, participation of general staff cannot be omitted either to approach a problem in detail and to develop leadership. In this essay, the outcome of both of these approaches will be discussed, followed by opinion. Managers are trained official to attain organizational goals. The decision making process of these people involves technical analysis of available information and the best use of available resources. To illustrate, a production manager, tasked to increase the number of quantity produced, focuses on the bottle-necks of the complete process and keeps expanding the identified obstacles to improve the production. Managers retain the company vision, which direct their thinking, resulting in the more appropriate deicisons. Moreover, supervisors paly the role of bridge between owner and workers by reducing expectation gap. As they maintain direct contact with both the parties, it is easy to share what the top-management expects. Similarly, the results of workers are carried to the high-officials. So their decision-making role plays a vital part in keeping balance between them. On the other hand, Involvement of employees in decision making offers the management to get better view over situations. In other words, as workers practically face the situations, they can provide detailed information and recommend the right ways to deal with a situation, if given the floor. Referring to, “The Economis-June 2018”, organizations invloving general staff in decision making has proven to have better capability to tackle the problems evolving from changing economy. From that ground, involvement of general employees in the management is rewarding. Furthermore, such involvement ensures the development of future managers, who also becomes satisfied and loyal to the company. As the workers find their views to be recognized, they remains satisfied, which also provide them the scope to learn to handle critical situation. The importance of developing future managers is crutial for the success of a firm. To conclude, bringing workers on the decision-making table along with the managers is a new concept, which offers the oppotunity to focus on micro-components of a sutuation. In my opinion, to run a company successfully, involvement of general staff is important to develop future management members and decide the right decision.
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Involvemnet
of blue-collar job holders in
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
progress
is discussed
in modern organizational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
management
. Though full-control of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
over the work-environment
is proven
method for a firm’s growth, participation of general staff cannot
be omitted
either to approach a problem in detail and to develop leadership. In this essay, the outcome of both of these approaches will
be discussed
, followed by opinion.

Managers
are trained
official to attain organizational goals. The
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
process of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
involves technical analysis of available information and the best
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of available resources. To illustrate, a production
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
manager
, tasked to increase the number of quantity produced, focuses on the bottle-necks of the complete process and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
expanding the identified obstacles to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the production.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Managers
retain the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
vision, which direct their thinking, resulting in the more appropriate
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deicisons
.
Moreover
, supervisors
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paly
the role of bridge between owner and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workers
by reducing expectation gap. As they maintain direct contact with both the parties, it is easy to share what the top-management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expects
.
Similarly
, the results of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workers
are carried
to the high-officials.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
their decision-making role plays a vital part in keeping balance between them.

On the other hand
, Involvement of employees in
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
offers the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
management
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
better view over
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situations
.
In other words
, as
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workers
practically
face the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situations
, they can provide detailed information and recommend the right ways to deal with a
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situation
, if
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the floor. Referring to, “The
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Economis-June
2018”, organizations
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invloving
general staff in
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
decision making
has proven to have better capability to tackle the problems evolving from changing economy. From that ground, involvement of general employees in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
management
is rewarding.
Furthermore
, such involvement ensures the development of future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
, who
also
becomes satisfied and loyal to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. As the
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workers
find their views to
be recognized
, they
The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "remain"
remains
satisfied, which
also
provide them the scope to learn to handle critical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
situation
. The importance of developing future
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managers
is
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crutial
for the success of a firm.

To conclude
, bringing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
workers
on the decision-making table along with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
managers
is a new concept, which offers the
Possible spelling mistake found.
oppotunity
to focus on micro-components of a
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sutuation
. In my opinion, to run a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
successfully
, involvement of general staff is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to develop future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
management
members and decide the right
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that managers alone should take decisions in the company while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
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