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16. 10. 2017Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

16. 10. 2017Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. v. 1
The increasing use of computers in modern education will promptly leave qualified teachers without a role in the academic classroom. Although recent technologies have significantly reduced the act of the teacher, I strongly disagree that this action would replace the role of a professor in a classroom. When referring to current education, it has been apparent that for the last couple of years the use of computers has increased thanks to the application of current technologies. This new asset has produced significant advantages for many students around the world in terms of providing modern software, databases, or even the access to immediate information. All these advantages are, in fact, the key in making sure those potential students are more capable of overcoming new challenges presented daily in a business environment. However, a point to carefully consider is that even though the duties of a teacher have been reduced, they are all specialists in their respective field and are the person responsible for making sure that implementing this new asset in their classroom will only encourage and develop new abilities in their students. As a prime example of this statement, there are multiple research studies which link student's knowledge with a professor's guidance and the competent use of computers. To conclude, although the number of computers has progressively increased in education, it will not leave teachers around the world without an active role. Teachers will still be required to guide and provide information to students utilizing this current and helpful asset.
The increasing
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of computers in modern education will
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leave
qualified
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teachers
without a role in the academic classroom. Although recent technologies have
significantly
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reduced
the act of the
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teacher
, I
strongly
disagree that this action would replace the role of a professor in a classroom.

When referring to
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current
education, it has been apparent that for the last couple of years the
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use
of computers has increased thanks to the application of
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current
technologies. This
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new
asset has produced significant advantages for
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many
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students
around the world in terms of providing modern software, databases, or even the access to immediate information. All these advantages are, in fact, the key in making sure those potential
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students
are more capable of overcoming
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new
challenges presented daily in a business environment.

However
, a point to
carefully
consider is that
even though
the duties of a
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teacher
have been
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reduced
, they are all specialists in their respective field and are the person responsible for making sure that implementing this
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new
asset in their classroom will
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only
encourage and develop
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new
abilities in their
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students
. As a prime example of this statement, there are multiple research studies which link student's knowledge with a professor's guidance and the competent
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use
of computers.

To conclude
, although the number of computers has
progressively
increased in education, it will not
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leave
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teachers
around the world without an active role.
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Teachers
will
still
be required
to guide and provide information to
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students
utilizing this
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current
and helpful asset.
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IELTS essay 16. 10. 2017Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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