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Some people think that it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 2
There is no doubt that companions play a vital role on an individual lifestyle. While many people believe that it is necessary to make friendship with those who have a similar point of view. Others argue that it is essential to maintain friendship with people who hold different thoughts. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and explain my support for the latter view. On the one hand, those who believe that like minded friends are superior choice might argue that they quickly develop trust and coordination between them. This is because they are always ready to help, and stand with each other despite thinking about the consequences. For example, many teenagers accept bad habits from their mates such as smoking, skipping lectures, and not respecting teachers. In contrast, if they have companions who guide them about right and wrong things, there will be a much greater chance for them to develop as a decent person. On the other hand, my view is that the unique approach mates are crucial because they can help others to think in a right way. The reason for thiss is that having disagreements people can form and develop their viewpoints. For instance, a sophisticated friend will always admire, encourages others to take part in welfare activities, and give advice for their betterment. However, if they are willing to engage in a disagreement with their peers, their conscience will be much clearer despite the agony of the argument. In conclusion, although hanging around with similar mindset mates with no argument is temporarily beneficial. I believe that the prospects of having outspoken companions are constructive which outweighs all denials.
There is no doubt that companions play a vital role on an individual lifestyle.
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thoughts. In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and
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my support for the latter view.

On the one hand, those
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they are always ready to
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despite thinking about the consequences.
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habits from their mates such as smoking, skipping lectures, and not respecting teachers.
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guide them about right and
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things, there will be a much greater chance for them to develop as a decent person.

On the
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can form and develop their viewpoints.
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, a sophisticated friend will always admire, encourages others to
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take part
in welfare activities, and give advice for their betterment.
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, if they are willing to engage in a disagreement with their peers, their conscience will be much clearer despite the agony of the argument.

In conclusion
, although hanging around with similar mindset mates with no argument is
temporarily
beneficial. I believe that the prospects of having outspoken companions are constructive which outweighs all denials.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Others believe that it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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