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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? xR5w
Nowadays, many individuals assert that industries relocation to the countryside from the urban centers would be advantageous to society. In my opinion, I agree to this statement and believe their merits are far more considerate than demerits which will be highlighted in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, there are many benefits when big production plants move from metropolitan to rural areas. Primarily, shifting from places would make these corporates beneficial in terms of disposing of their waste as cities have less areas to dump junk materials in comparison with the outskirts. Not only it can reduce the various types of pollution caused in the town, but also will lead to proper disposing of waste without disturbing the ecosystem. Secondarily, people in rural areas get employment opportunities as the setup of manufacturing units requires labor for the production of goods. Thus, it can improve their standard of living along with the development of the local town. For instance, a report published by the Ministry of Industry and Commerce, India in August 2016 stated that job prospects as well as infrastructure of the local areas took a huge leap after the industries moved to the small areas from urban centers. Furthermore, congestion of open land areas has always been a headache for big corporations however, it is achievable for them in the outer areas of the cities as they have an abundance of lands that can allow them to setup big factories resulting in increasing their revenues. On the contrary, certainly there are demerits of shifting the plants to the rural areas. Firstly, production of goods can be hampered. To enhance, setting up units in the remote areas causes difficulty as the transportation facilities and availability of the raw materials are less in those areas. Not only it can reduce their efficiency, but also can degrade the prestigious name and reputation of the company. Secondly, it can lead to unemployment in the cities. To clarify, when an industry closes their operations and resettles to other remote areas, the job openings in the metro areas decline gradually. For instance, a survey conducted by the World Economic Forum in October 2018 in the USA over 500 individuals showed that over 80 percent of them became unemployed due to shifting of the companies to areas rather than cities. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that although the advantages of production units being shifted to non-metro areas are significant, their disadvantages cannot be ignored. If a balanced approach is followed in terms of providing job security and better transportation aspects of goods then companies can generate huge volumes of profits.
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individuals assert that
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industries
relocation to the countryside from the urban centers would be advantageous to society. In my opinion, I
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agree
to this statement and believe their merits are far more considerate than demerits which will
be highlighted
in the upcoming paragraphs.

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with, there are
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benefits when
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production
plants
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move
from metropolitan to rural
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.
Primarily
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beneficial in terms of disposing of their waste as cities have
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less
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to dump junk materials
in comparison
with the outskirts. Not
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only
it can
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reduce
the various types of pollution caused in the town,
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but
also
will lead to proper disposing of waste without disturbing the ecosystem.
Secondarily
,
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people
in rural
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areas
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get
employment opportunities as the setup of manufacturing units requires labor for the
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production
of
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goods
.
Thus
, it can
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improve
their standard of living along with the development of the local town.
For instance
, a report published by the Ministry of
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Industry
and Commerce, India in August 2016 stated that job prospects
as well
as infrastructure of the local
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areas
took a huge leap after the
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industries
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moved
to the
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small
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areas
from urban centers.

Furthermore
, congestion of open land
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areas
has always been a headache for
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big
corporations
however
, it is achievable for them in the outer
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areas
of the cities as they have an abundance of lands that can
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allow
them
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big
factories resulting in increasing their revenues.

On the contrary
,
certainly
there are demerits of shifting the plants to the rural
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areas
.
Firstly
,
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production
of
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goods
can
be hampered
. To enhance, setting up units in the remote
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areas
causes difficulty as the transportation facilities and availability of the raw materials are less in those
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areas
. Not
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only
it can
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reduce
their efficiency,
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but
also
can degrade the prestigious name and reputation of the
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company
.
Secondly
, it can lead to unemployment in the cities. To clarify, when an
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industry
closes their operations and resettles to other remote
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areas
, the job openings in the metro
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areas
decline
gradually
.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the World Economic Forum in October 2018 in the USA over 500 individuals
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showed
that over 80 percent of them became unemployed due to shifting of the
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companies
to
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areas
rather
than cities.

To encapsulate, it can
be concluded
that although the advantages of
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production
units
being shifted
to non-metro
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areas
are significant, their disadvantages cannot be
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ignored
. If a balanced approach
is followed
in terms of providing job security and better transportation aspects of
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goods
then
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companies
can generate huge volumes of profits.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside urban centers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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