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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement? PPbw
In past, there was not available any medical technology and techniques. However, the average standard health of human life was higher than modern world with revolution in medical sector. But the average health will be reduced definitely in future as per my opinion. In 21st century, people tend to take a risk of health for their work and leisure activities. People are blindly following the trend of urbanization to expect the lifestyle as same as of upper-class people and celebrities. People follow the activities such as food, living style, use of costly gadgets and their hobbies but don't try to see the way the famous personalities work and hard work for health. This type of simulation affects badly to people's health. For example, actors do smoke and consume the alcohol. When teenager watch these types of scenes, they think that smoke and drinks are the way to become cool and dashing guy and start these dangerous activities without reading the caution printed on the packets of cigarette and bottles of alcohol which clearly explain the risk of cancer after consumption of these products. To cop up with the fast-growing world we have damaged our biological cycle and welcomed the serious diseases. Human of modern era try to reflect as solid and healthy but, is hollow. The thought process of modern people has changed about life. Money has made everyone mad and blind. Person run after money and do not try to take care about own body. People have depended on allopathic medicines. In past, first importance was given to own health and then money but nowadays it is totally become opposite. For example, an advertisement about a man who was became patient of cancer due to high tobacco consumption. He was labor and consumed tobacco to enjoy the work and to earn money which leads him to the death. Hence, if we will continue our lifestyle, the overall human health will be reduced whether medical science will be at blooming stage or not.
Did you mean: "In the past"?
In past
, there was not available any medical technology and techniques.
However
, the average standard
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health
of human life was higher than modern world with revolution in medical sector.
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But
the average
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health
will be
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reduced
definitely in future as per my opinion.

In 21st century,
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people
tend to take a
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risk
of
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health
for their
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work
and leisure activities.
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People
are
blindly
following the trend of urbanization to
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expect
the lifestyle as same as of upper-
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class
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people
and celebrities.
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People
follow the activities such as food, living style,
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use
of costly gadgets and their hobbies
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but
don't try to
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see
the way the
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famous
personalities
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work
and
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hard
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work
for
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health
. This type of simulation affects
badly
to
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people
's
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health
.
For example
, actors do smoke and consume the alcohol. When
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teenager
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watch
these types of scenes, they
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think
that smoke and drinks are the way to become cool and dashing guy and
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start
these
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dangerous
activities without reading the caution printed on the packets of cigarette and bottles of alcohol which
clearly
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explain
the
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risk
of cancer after consumption of these products.

To cop up with the
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fast
-growing world we have damaged our biological cycle and welcomed the serious diseases. Human of modern era try to reflect as solid and healthy
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but
, is hollow. The
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thought
process of modern
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people
has
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changed
about life.
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Money
has made everyone mad and blind. Person run after
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money
and do not try to take care about
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own
body.
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People
have depended on allopathic medicines.
Did you mean: "In the past"?
In past
,
first
importance was
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given
to
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own
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health
and then
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money
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but
nowadays it is
totally
become opposite.
For example
, an advertisement about a
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man
who was
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became
patient of cancer due to high tobacco consumption. He was labor and consumed tobacco to enjoy the
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work
and to earn
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money
which leads him to the death.

Hence
, if we will continue our lifestyle, the
overall
human
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health
will be
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reduced
whether medical science will be at blooming stage or not.
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IELTS essay The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
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