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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages v.9

Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages v. 9
No 2 It is some people' s view that large companies relocate to the suburb away from the city. The benefits of this overwhelm its drawbacks. Clearly, there are some benefits to relocation of large industries to rural areas. Firstly, it creates job opportunity for the dwellers which appears to eradicate poverty. Residents of the community attend to menial jobs in the factory, they get paid and their immediate needs are met. In addition, the raw materials needed for production are readily available in the rural area, so the poor transportation factor to the city is solved. Another benefits is the large land space for construction available in the regional areas. They are given a large portion of land to install their heavy equipments and building offices. Despite these advantages, there are some drawbacks to it. Relocating to the regional areas makes the organization looses valuable customers, as their new site will be too far away from them. Also, there will be lack of well skilled workers. Some of their employees appear to be used to city life, moving to the rural area might not go down well with them, so they forfeit the job. Getting to the community, the company will need to employ more workers, doing so, people with little or no experience will be employed which might have a negative effect on the company' s production. Although, these can be solved by introducing an attractive pay to the highly skilled staffs from the city In conclusion, some people think large companies should move to the rural areas. Despite its advantages such as poverty eradication and large land space, there are also some drawbacks that can be properly managed.
No 2

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some
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people&
#039; s view that
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large
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companies
relocate to the suburb away from the city. The benefits of this overwhelm its drawbacks.

Clearly
, there are
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some
benefits to relocation of
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large
industries to
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rural
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areas
.
Firstly
, it creates job opportunity for the dwellers which appears to eradicate poverty. Residents of the community attend to menial jobs in the factory, they
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get
paid and their immediate needs
are met
.
In addition
, the raw materials needed for production are
readily
available in the
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rural
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area
,
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so
the poor transportation factor to the city
is solved
. Another benefits
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is
the
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large
land space for construction available in the regional
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areas
. They are
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given
a
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large
portion of land to install their heavy equipments and building offices.

Despite these advantages, there are
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some
drawbacks to it. Relocating to the regional
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areas
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makes
the organization looses valuable customers, as their new site will be too far away from them.
Also
, there will be lack of well skilled workers.
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Some
of their employees appear to be
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used
to city life, moving to the
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rural
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area
might not go down well with them,
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so
they forfeit the job. Getting to the community, the
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company
will need to employ more workers, doing
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so
,
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people
with
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or no experience will
be employed
which might have a
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negative
effect on the
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company&
#039; s production.
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Although
, these can
be solved
by introducing an attractive pay to the
highly
skilled staffs from the city

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
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think
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large
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companies
should
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move
to the
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rural
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areas
. Despite its advantages such as poverty eradication and
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large
land space, there are
also
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some
drawbacks that can be
properly
managed.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centers Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages v. 9

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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