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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other believe that it is not necessary to travel aboard because all the information can be seen at tv and internet. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other believe that it is not necessary to travel aboard because all the information can be seen at tv and internet. V2mA
Nowadays, travelling become popular among people. A number of individuals opinion that by travel to abroad people can gain knowledge about nation, others believe that mass media has better choice. In my view points, I stand with those who support modern media. On the one hand, in these days travelling gain high popularity because it has a best way to explore other countries culture. The reason is that by visit other nations, visitors can contact with native people of other continents, it will be grateful for them to Learn tradition and rituals by communication they can also gain immense information about societal level. The next is that travelling can help to increase the economical growth of country. To explain, not only shopping, food displays will increased but also help to reach peak point of countries air transport services. For example, it has been proved that some tourist nations can contribute in the advancement of economy because millions of airplane tickets sold day by day. On the other hand, technology is growing day by day and new inventions are coming into market with the help of technical gadgets people can see other continents without travelling. Firstly, people who belong ill wealthy families cannot afford travel expenses due to the fact that we all know that travelling has expensive activity, so they use internet facilities to know other countries. Secondly, owing to the fact that busy schedule, people have not enough time to travel so these types of population used internet in a short time, can see photos of the famous view spots, the local history of town and receive information about people through the web browser, as it has more flexible and convenient process. In conclusion, although travelling is a great source for access information of other places, but in my view internet has more benefits as it represent flexible learning method.
Nowadays,
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travelling
become popular among
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people
. A number of individuals opinion that by travel to abroad
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people
can gain knowledge about nation, others believe that mass media has better choice. In my view points, I stand with those who support modern media.

On the one hand, in these days
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travelling
gain high popularity
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because
it has
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a
best way to explore
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other
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countries
culture. The reason is that by visit
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other
nations, visitors can contact with native
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people
of
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other
continents, it will be grateful for them to Learn tradition and rituals by communication they can
also
gain immense information about societal level. The
next
is that
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travelling
can
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help
to increase the
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economical
growth of
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country
. To
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explain
, not
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only
shopping, food displays will increased
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but
also
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help
to reach peak point of
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countries
air transport services.
For example
, it has
been proved
that
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some
tourist nations can contribute in the advancement of economy
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because
millions of airplane tickets sold day by day.

On the
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other
hand, technology is growing day by day and new inventions are coming into market with the
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help
of technical gadgets
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people
can
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see
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other
continents without
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travelling
.
Firstly
,
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people
who belong ill wealthy families cannot afford travel expenses due to the fact that we all know that
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travelling
has expensive activity,
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so
they
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use
internet facilities to know
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other
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countries
.
Secondly
, owing to the fact that busy schedule,
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people
have not
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enough
time to travel
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so
these types of population
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used
internet in a short time, can
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see
photos of the
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famous
view spots, the local history of town and receive information about
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people
through the web browser, as it has more flexible and convenient process.

In conclusion
, although
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travelling
is a great source for access information of
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other
places,
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but
in my view internet has more benefits as it represent flexible learning method.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other believe that it is not necessary to travel aboard because all the information can be seen at tv and internet.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
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