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Some people believe murders should be sent to death sentences, but other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe murders should be sent to death sentences, but other disagree. eLVB
The proper way to punish the murderers is by applying a death sentence as an effect of serious crime that was ever undertaken, meanwhile it is assumed highly hazardous as it contradicts to human rights. The practice of death sentence tends to be more controlling, preventing to continual crimes. Death sentence will extremely restrain the perpetrators or the potential doers to stop killing human, because the existence of perpetrators will end immediately. For instance, in India, the rate of murderers went down 25% in the end of 2019 as the policy to death sentence started to be enforced, compared to last five years there were three folds cases that continually commited because every murderers did not got feasible punishment that induced to sustainable behavior. Therefore, the imposition of the death penalty must be implemented because it can stop murder cases increase. However, for some people, enforcing the death penalty for murderers is not a good choice because the justice must see human rights who have the right to live, and this is inhumane. Therefore, criminals can realize their mistakes, and times will be given by them to correct the mistakes that have been made. For instance, in the US, a child who kills his mother is immediately arrested because the court finds out what really happened to the perpetrator, and that the criminal has been depressed since childhood. Therefore, the child is given a prison sentence and handled by a psychiatric specialist so that the child gets recovery and is aware of his actions. In conclusion, the serious effect exerted on the killer is emphasized even more. However, the justice should notice human right due to murderers can repent. Can government waive the serious effect of death penalty without seeing human rights?
The proper way to punish the
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murderers
is by applying a death
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sentence
as an effect of serious crime that was ever undertaken, meanwhile it
is assumed
highly
hazardous as it contradicts to
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human
rights.

The practice of death
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sentence
tends to be more controlling, preventing to continual crimes. Death
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sentence
will
extremely
restrain the perpetrators or the potential doers to
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stop
killing
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human
,
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because
the existence of perpetrators will
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end
immediately.
For instance
, in India, the rate of
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murderers
went down 25% in the
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end
of 2019 as the policy to death
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sentence
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started
to
be enforced
, compared to last five years there were three folds cases that
continually
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commited
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because
every
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murderers
did not
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got
feasible punishment that induced to sustainable behavior.
Therefore
, the imposition of the death penalty
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must
be implemented
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because
it can
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stop
murder cases increase.

However
, for
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some
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people
, enforcing the death penalty for
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murderers
is not a
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good
choice
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because
the justice
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must
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see
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human
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rights
who have the
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right
to
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live
, and this is inhumane.
Therefore
, criminals can realize their mistakes, and times will be
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given
by them to correct the mistakes that have
been made
.
For instance
, in the US, a child who kills his mother is immediately arrested
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because
the court finds out what
really
happened to the perpetrator, and that the criminal has
been depressed
since childhood.
Therefore
, the child is
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given
a prison
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sentence
and handled by a psychiatric specialist
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so
that the child
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gets
recovery and is aware of his actions.

In conclusion
, the serious effect exerted on the killer
is emphasized
even more.
However
, the justice should notice
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human
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right
due to
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murderers
can repent. Can
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government
waive the serious effect of death penalty without seeing
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human
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rights
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IELTS essay Some people believe murders should be sent to death sentences, but other disagree.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.0
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