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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries. Others however, believe it is unnecessary because TV and the Internet can give all the same information.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries. Others however, believe it is unnecessary because TV and the Internet can give all the same information. v. 3
With the advancement in technology and cheaper transportation costs, the world is becoming smaller than ever before. There are contrasting views of people on learning about other countries cultures and traditions. Visiting these countries is preferred by some, whereas others are of the opinion that this can be done by the medium of internet and TV. I will delve into both views and would add my comment to them. On one hand is the traditional way of visiting other countries, meeting their natives, experiencing their weather, live through the beauty of the exotic places can help to understand other culture more deeply. For example, no media can explain the uncertainty of Canada’s weather, nor the beauty of Niagra Falls can bw depicted by pictures. Thus, this way is preferred by most of the people. On the other hand, getting into the use of internet is the cost and time effective way of getting information about other countries cultures and their way of living. Technology has also made it easier to connect with people leaving across the borders. To conclude everything that has been stated so far, both the ways have their own advantages which can not be neglected. However, I would go with the former view as I like to meet new people personally and to put myself in their shoes is the best way to get to know them, I think.
With the advancement in technology and cheaper transportation costs, the world is becoming smaller than ever
before
. There are contrasting views of
people
on learning about
other
countries
cultures and traditions. Visiting these
countries
is preferred
by
some
, whereas others are of the opinion that this can
be done
by the medium of internet and TV. I will delve into both views and would
add
my comment to them.

On one hand is the traditional way of visiting
other
countries
, meeting their natives, experiencing their weather,
live
through the beauty of the exotic places can
help
to understand
other
culture more
deeply
.
For example
, no media can
explain
the uncertainty of Canada’s weather, nor the beauty of
Niagra
Falls can
bw
depicted by pictures.
Thus
, this way
is preferred
by most of the
people
.

On the
other
hand, getting into the
use
of internet is the cost and time effective way of getting information about
other
countries
cultures and their way of living. Technology has
also
made it easier to connect with
people
leaving across the borders.

To conclude
everything that has
been stated
so
far, both the ways have their
own
advantages which can not
be neglected
.
However
, I would
go with
the former view as I like to
meet
new
people
personally
and to put myself in their shoes is the best way to
get
to know them, I
think
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries. Others however, believe it is unnecessary because TV and the Internet can give all the same information.

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