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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. . q71a
At present, with the modernisation parents prefer to send their off-springs to co-educational institutes but still, there are many families having outdated thoughts that children must be sent into boys or in girls schools. It is to be pondered by few individuals that sending their juveniles to same school have more advantages rather than at different schools, while others contradict this above notion. According to my views, both gender can definitely advantages from mixed school as compared to dinstict one. In this essay we will discuss both perspectives. To commence with, the very first category of community ignoring the idea of same school is because in separate schools it will be elementary for tutors to make understand some concepts or topics of biology, which cannot be able to explain in combine educational institutes. In an survey, it was find out by one of Government school teachers that the adults from separate schools can teach science concepts in a good manner in contrast to others who hails from mixed schools. Nevertheless, other demographics consider that phenomenon of one building for boys and girls bring numerous merits such as co-operation enhances this all because, when both sex variation educate together they came to know about the physical changes, or problems faced by genders with which leads to burgeoning the respect among them it really helps them to understand each other. After their marriage they are able to make their relationships stronger and even longer. It was published in an article "Happy Coulpes" and assumed that the couples from mixed schools are the happiest one to opposite one. To conclude, I believe that the concept of taking education under same roof of building brings more knowledge, understanding towards one another, relationship makes stronger and longer indeed; therefore Government should enhance such types of programmes then in true sense a country becomes a developed country.
At present, with the
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modernisation
parents prefer to
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send
their off-springs to co-educational institutes
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but
still
, there are
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many
families having outdated thoughts that children
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must
be
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sent
into boys or in girls
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schools
. It is to
be pondered
by few individuals that sending their juveniles to same
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school
have more advantages
rather
than at
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different
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schools
, while others contradict this above notion. According to my views, both gender can definitely
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advantages
from mixed
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school
as compared to
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dinstict
one. In this essay we will discuss both perspectives.

To commence with, the
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very
first
category of community ignoring the
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idea
of same
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school
is
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because
in separate
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schools
it will be elementary for tutors to
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make
understand
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some
concepts or topics of biology, which cannot be able to
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explain
in combine educational institutes. In
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an
survey, it was
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find
out by one of
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Government
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school
teachers that the adults from separate
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schools
can teach science concepts in a
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good
manner
in contrast
to others who
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hails
from mixed schools.

Nevertheless
,
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other
demographics consider that phenomenon of one building for boys and girls bring numerous merits such as co-operation enhances this all
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because
, when both sex variation educate together they came to know about the physical
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changes
, or problems faced by genders with which leads to burgeoning the respect among them it
really
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helps
them to understand each
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other
. After their marriage they are able to
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make
their relationships stronger and even longer. It
was published
in an article
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"
Happy
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Coulpes
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"
and assumed that the couples from mixed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
are the happiest one to opposite one.

To conclude
, I believe that the concept of taking education under same roof of building brings more knowledge, understanding towards one another, relationship
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
stronger and longer
indeed
;
therefore
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should enhance such types of
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programmes
then in true sense a country becomes a
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developed country
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. .

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