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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As a matter of fact, although some human being assume that boys and girls should be trained in the different places, some others reckon that all of the children must go to school together, because of its advantage. This essay agrees with the second point of view and will discuss both points of view followed by a logical conclusion. In one hand, a group of people believe that children should go to separated schools according their gender. This people think that children would be harmed, if they educated in mix schools, due to differences of their behave, psychology, personality and so on which are caused by their sex. It is disagreed with this idea, because in the many of developed countries, children including of boys and girls are growing up very healthy despite going to mixed schools. In the other hand, there is an opinion which is accepted by some individuals and it stats that spending childhood in the complex schools would be more helpful for any child. It is obvious that daughters and sons have so many differences as mentioned in previous paragraph but children could familiar with each other by communication during several years in the mixed schools. As a result, this matter is so useful when children would be adult, because they had been learning how people could be treated respectfully despite their gender. In addition, they could choose their partner with awareness. In summary, in my opinion, it will be more useful if children go to mixed schools, because their differences have advantage which will influence on their life such as choosing a partner.
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with the second point of view and will discuss both points of view followed by a logical conclusion.

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people
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children
should go to separated
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schools
according their gender. This
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people
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that
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, due to differences of their behave, psychology, personality and
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developed countries
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healthy despite going to
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differences as mentioned in previous paragraph
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children
could familiar with each other by communication during several years in the mixed
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schools
.
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, this matter is
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children
would be adult,
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they had been learning how
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people
could
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respectfully
despite their gender.
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, they could choose their partner with awareness.

In summary, in my opinion, it will be more useful if
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children
go to mixed
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schools
,
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because
their differences have advantage which will influence on their life such as choosing a partner.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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