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Some people think that it is beneficial for youngsters to live on their own or with friends after completing school.Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that it is beneficial for youngsters to live on their own or with friends after completing school. QLR6b
It is a fact that nowadays many children used to stay away from their parents after their course. There are some individuals who believe that after the schooling, it is good for the teenagers to stay alone or with their friends. In my opinion I agree with this statement. One of the main reasons for certain people to believe that adolescents should stay away from their parentsowing to the fact that children will learn how to live independently. They eventually know how they can stay by themselves in this practical and competitive world without support of their parents interms of money, cooking as well as to select needy items. For instance, in Indian, it is a common trend that happening in students to engage in part time jobs when they do study in foreign countries which is a great help for their parents those who have financial issues. As a result it is good for teenagers to stay away from their parents. Why some individuals believe that it is better children to stay away from their parents because teenagers will get huge oppertunities to develop their career. If a child stay with their parents, they will be pampered too much by the parents in addition that certain restrictions also will be there. I experienced in my personal life, when I graduated as a nurse there were many jobs which i wish to choose but due to my parents restrictions I couldn't select many jobs. So nice to live alone or with friends after schooling because there are lots of oppertunities for them to search without boundaries. In conclusion, there are a group of Indian individual says that after schooling it's better teenagers to stay alone or with friends rather than saying with their parents. I personally believe that it is nice to stay away from their parents after their school studies
It is a fact that nowadays
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children
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used
to
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stay
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away
from their
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parents
after their course. There are
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some
individuals who
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believe
that after the schooling, it is
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good
for the
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teenagers
to
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stay
alone or with their friends. In my opinion I
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agree
with this statement.

One of the main reasons for certain
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people
to
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believe
that adolescents should
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stay
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away
from their
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parentsowing
to the fact that children will learn how to
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live
independently
. They
eventually
know how they can
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stay
by themselves in this practical and competitive world without support of their
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parents
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interms
of money, cooking
as well
as to select needy items.
For instance
, in Indian, it is a common trend that happening in students to engage in
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part time
jobs when they do study in foreign countries which is a great
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help
for their
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parents
those who have financial issues.
As a result
it is
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good
for
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teenagers
to
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stay
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away
from their parents.

Why
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some
individuals
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believe
that it is better children to
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stay
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away
from their
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parents
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because
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teenagers
will
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get
huge
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oppertunities
to develop their career. If a child
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stay
with their
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parents
, they will
be pampered
too much by the
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parents
in addition
that certain restrictions
also
will be there. I experienced in my personal life, when I graduated as a nurse there were
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many
jobs which
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i
wish to choose
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but
due to my
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parents
restrictions I couldn't select
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many
jobs.
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So
nice to
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live
alone or with friends after schooling
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because
there are lots of
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oppertunities
for them to search without boundaries.

In conclusion
, there are a
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group
of Indian individual says that after schooling
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it's
better
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teenagers
to
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stay
alone or with friends
rather
than saying with their
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parents
. I
personally
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believe
that it is nice to
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stay
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away
from their
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parents
after their school
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studies
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is beneficial for youngsters to live on their own or with friends after completing school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
6.0
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