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Some businesses prohibit smoking in the company and also governments who issued ban on smoking in public area How do you feel about it

Some businesses prohibit smoking in the company and also governments who issued ban on smoking in public area How do you feel about it MMrEN
Smoking in evidently is hazardous for health. There are some business firms who have banned smoking in their offices as a step to help employees lead a healthier lifestyle. There are also some governments who have completely banned the use of cigarettes in public places. Even though this a great initiative by the businesses and governments, it is a personal choice whether someone opts for it or otherwise. The positives of smoking are all about either making a style statement or having fun with it. People like to smoke when they are under extreme pressured circumstances, like family issues or work stress. They like to smoke and chill when they are with their colleagues or friends. Also, the government makes good amount of profit by selling tobacco and cigarettes, which is then used to built schools, hospitals and publics places like parks or gardens. I probably would not see any other positivity in this. Talking about the negatives, if we go to read the history of people who are passive smokers or rigorous smokers the effect on their health has been very dangerous and intimidating. When you have a chain smoker around you, your friend or colleague or your family member, it not only affects the person but the people who are close to them also suffer immensely. The number of deaths due to smoking have been increasing every year, making it a global concern. Governments have been initiating anti-smoking campaigns and imposing rules to help people understand the adverse effects and encourage them to eventually quit smoking, especially the youth. Well, I would like to end this by saying that we will have a better and healthier world without the cigarettes. People should refrain from smoking in places where there are non-smokers but should otherwise be allowed to smoke in smoking zone areas or elsewhere.
Smoking
in
evidently
is hazardous for health. There are
some
business firms
who
have banned
smoking
in their offices as a step to
help
employees lead a healthier lifestyle. There are
also
some
governments
who
have completely banned the
use
of cigarettes in public places.
Even though
this a great initiative by the businesses and
governments
, it is a personal choice whether someone opts for it or
otherwise
.

The positives of
smoking
are all about either making a style statement or having fun with it.
People
like to smoke when they are under extreme pressured circumstances, like family issues or work
stress
. They like to smoke and chill when they are with their colleagues or friends.
Also
, the
government
makes
good
amount of profit by selling tobacco and cigarettes, which is then
used
to built schools, hospitals and
publics
places like parks or gardens. I
probably
would not
see
any other positivity in this.

Talking about the negatives, if we go to read the history of
people
who
are passive smokers or rigorous smokers the effect on their health has been
very
dangerous
and intimidating. When you have a chain smoker around you, your friend or colleague or your family member, it not
only
affects the person
but
the
people
who
are close to them
also
suffer
immensely
. The number of deaths due to
smoking
have been increasing every year, making it a global concern.
Governments
have been initiating anti-smoking campaigns and imposing
rules
to
help
people
understand the adverse effects and encourage them to
eventually
quit
smoking
,
especially
the youth.

Well, I would like to
end
this by saying that we will have a better and healthier world without the cigarettes.
People
should refrain from
smoking
in places where there are non-smokers
but
should
otherwise
be
allowed
to smoke in
smoking
zone areas or elsewhere.
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IELTS essay Some businesses prohibit smoking in the company and also governments who issued ban on smoking in public area How do you feel about it

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
6.0
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