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Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other, while opponents say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other.

Society plays an essential role in everyone's life. It have been controversial whether contemporary society multitudes depend on each other or not. Let us deliberate s I will discuss both views along with my opinion which will lead towards a logical inference. There are myriad of reasons to shore light upon the given proclivity. Discussing the first view, children's become more dependent. To justify, in modern era, kids are totally rely on parents for various purposes like clothes, accommodation, shelter and many more things.
Society plays an essential role in everyone's life. It
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been controversial whether contemporary society multitudes depend on each other or not.
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us deliberate s I will discuss both views along with my opinion which will lead towards a logical inference.

There are myriad of reasons to shore light upon the
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given
proclivity. Discussing the
first
view, children's become more dependent. To justify, in modern era, kids are
totally
rely on parents for various purposes like clothes, accommodation, shelter and
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IELTS essay Some people think that in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other, while opponents say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
84 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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