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Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. v. 2
Easing the traffic density continues to be controversial as so many people are struggling with the traffic snarl-up. There are arguments on both sides of this every topical debate. While people claim that the prohibition of personal vehicles in the metropolitan city is an impracticable method, I believe that the traffic problem is resolved by banning automobile ownership. The following essay will expound upon both perspectives in addition to supporting my opinion. Proponents of banning individual transport in the city center argue that it reduces traffic congestion. For example, privately transport owners would be banned, leading the fall for the volume of traffic, that diminishes demand for space on available infrastructure capacity and traffic congestion. Furthermore, traffic jams have a pessimistic consequence on air quality. Motorbikes, dominate vehicle in my country, are non-renewable sources consumption and carbon dioxide emissions which contribute to climate change and global warming. Lastly, there is the health issue caused to the vehicle users. The incidence of asthma and lung cancer has increased because of inhaling the exhaust fumes released by means of transport on the road. Conversely, those who oppose the prohibition of vehicles say that it is the improbability as a result of insufficient public transport systems. For instance, in developing countries, the public infrastructure has not accommodated inadequately for a rapidly growing population, as the consequence, leading the overcrowding on public transport and non-punctuality which effect on people' s mentality like disquiet and apprehension and their time schedule. Finally, the private means of transport dependency among citizens is expanding extensively. It is more attraction rather than public transportation because of its accessibility and comfort. Overall, it is certain that this bans will hard implement, as private transport has given us so convenient. In my view, people should curb their vehicles and attempt to utilize public mode as the main of transport.
Easing the
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density continues to be controversial as
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so
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many
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people
are struggling with the
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traffic
snarl-up. There are arguments on both sides of this every topical debate. While
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people
claim that the prohibition of personal
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vehicles
in the metropolitan city is an impracticable method, I believe that the
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traffic
problem
is resolved
by banning automobile ownership. The following essay will expound upon both perspectives
in addition
to supporting my opinion.

Proponents of banning individual
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transport
in the city center argue that it
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reduces
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traffic
congestion.
For example
,
privately
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transport
owners would
be banned
, leading the fall for the volume of
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traffic
, that diminishes demand for space on available infrastructure capacity and
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traffic
congestion.
Furthermore
,
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traffic
jams have a pessimistic consequence on air quality. Motorbikes, dominate
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vehicle
in my country, are non-renewable sources consumption and carbon dioxide emissions which contribute to climate
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change
and global warming.
Lastly
, there is the health issue caused to the
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vehicle
users. The incidence of asthma and lung cancer has increased
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because
of inhaling the exhaust fumes released by means of
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transport
on the road.

Conversely
, those who oppose the prohibition of
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vehicles
say that it is the improbability
as a result
of insufficient
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public
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transport
systems.
For instance
, in
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developing countries
, the
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public
infrastructure has not accommodated
inadequately
for a
rapidly
growing population, as the consequence, leading the overcrowding on
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public
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transport
and non-punctuality which effect on
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#039; s mentality like disquiet and apprehension and their time schedule.
Finally
, the private means of
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transport
dependency among citizens is expanding
extensively
. It is more attraction
rather
than
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public
transportation
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because
of its accessibility and comfort.

Overall
, it is certain that this bans will
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hard
implement, as private
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transport
has
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given
us
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so
convenient. In my view,
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people
should curb their
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vehicles
and attempt to utilize
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public
mode as the main of
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transport
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned in city centers, while others consider this to be an unrealistic solution. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.5
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