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Some people prefer to live in an apartment, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in a house. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in an apartment compared with living in a house? v.1

Some people prefer to live in an apartment, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in a house. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in an apartment compared with living in a house? v. 1
In the past, there was an inauguration of constructing houses in several countries such as tenement houses, farmhouses, and historic homes. Whereas, in ancient times, people' s preference was mainly preferred for the ground level of construction. because people think that, they should receive fresh air into the house and gardening in an outdoor area. however, at present, tables have turned, currently, it is noticed that in many metropolitan cities are well-developed gradually in the progress of the architectural sector as well as modern infrastructure. As far as benefits are considered. there are many noticeable aspects. One of the most rewarding features is that living in an apartment is more cozy, trendy and environmentally friendly. because many builders and architectures suggested to people for purchasing apartments with various kinds of amenities such as car parking, clubhouse, commercial garden, playhouse, in-built security system, and gymnasium. Moreover, people appreciated this new concept of a luxurious lifestyle in urban areas. it has considered the improvement in societies. Although, other people still believe that residential houses provide them with an independent lifestyle. it is advisable that individual landlords are having more freedom in case of renovation for in-house and outdoor. In contrast, it has been noticed that people living in the apartment were facing some fundamental issues with their neighbourhoods. this creates conflict between them. By and large, almost everywhere, it is noticed that a high standard of living has been increased and facilitated for people in this modern era. Due to the increasing population has made the reduction of constructing houses in an urban area or downtown cities. however, the disadvantages should not be overlooked. several apartments are established in cosmopolitan cities, but there is some drawback associated between the people living in a similar building. For instance, ample parking issues may concern worries in society. As a matter of fact, several people think priorities are a significant impact on their life. In this foreseeable future, I believe that the apartment will be a beneficial outcome to accommodate rather than living in a house.
In the past, there was an inauguration of constructing
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houses
in several countries such as tenement
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houses
, farmhouses, and historic homes. Whereas, in ancient times,
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mainly
preferred for the ground level of construction.
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because
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people
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think
that, they should receive fresh air into the
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house
and gardening in an outdoor area.
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however
, at present, tables have turned,
currently
, it
is noticed
that in
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many
metropolitan cities are well-developed
gradually
in the progress of the architectural sector
as well
as modern infrastructure.

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As
far as benefits
are considered
.
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there
are
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many
noticeable aspects. One of the most rewarding features is that
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living
in an
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apartment
is more cozy, trendy and
environmentally
friendly.
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because
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many
builders and architectures suggested to
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people
for purchasing
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apartments
with various kinds of amenities such as car parking, clubhouse, commercial garden, playhouse, in-built security system, and gymnasium.
Moreover
,
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people
appreciated this new concept of a luxurious lifestyle in urban areas.
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it
has considered the improvement in societies.
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Although
, other
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people
still
believe that residential
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houses
provide them with an independent lifestyle.
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it
is advisable that individual landlords are having more freedom in case of renovation for in-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and outdoor.

In contrast
, it has
been noticed
that
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people
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living
in the
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apartment
were facing
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some
fundamental issues with their
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neighbourhoods
.
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this
creates conflict between them. By and large, almost everywhere, it
is noticed
that a high standard of
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living
has
been increased
and facilitated for
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people
in this modern era. Due to the increasing population has made the reduction of constructing
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houses
in an urban area or downtown cities.

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however
, the disadvantages should not
be overlooked
.
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several
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apartments
are established
in cosmopolitan cities,
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but
there is
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some
drawback associated between the
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people
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living
in a similar building.
For instance
, ample parking issues may concern worries in society. As a matter of fact, several
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
priorities are a significant impact on their life. In this foreseeable future, I believe that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
apartment
will be a beneficial outcome to accommodate
rather
than
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living
in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people prefer to live in an apartment, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in a house. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in an apartment compared with living in a house? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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