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Some people think that in a order

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Many people opine that to clear up the difficulty of traffic congestion or blockage, along with the problem of conveyance, humans should be uplifted to settle their lives in metropolitan towns instead of living in the outskirt areas or in the surroundings. I agree with this statement because the problem of traffic jams and blockage is growing burgeonically. So, people must migrate to big metropolis towns instead of surviving in villages and its surroundings. To commence with, traffic congestion is growing burgeonically because of advancement in technologies. Every member of the family needs his personal vehicle. So, more the members are, more the number of vehicles will be. They use their personal vehicles for their works, jobs or study, which will surely lead to block the road. In addition, transportation is also very difficult. To cite an epitome, in the year of 1996, a survey had been conducted by Phillipone university of America, which resulted that about 70% of the traffic blockage was due to the increasing number of vehicles, which do not allow transportation to pass through it. Secondly, traffic congestion is a very serious issue or problem, which is sometimes due to the shortage of area. So, to solve this problem, people must have to shift to big metropolitan cities. So that it could be less time consuming. People should not live in villages instead they should migrate to big towns. To exemplify, a survey was conducted in 2009 by Wednesday times was consequented that 90% of people from villages or outskirts were migrated to towns because of traffic and transportational problems. To recapitulate, traffic congestion and transportational problems can be solved by migrating the people to towns. It will be less time consuming and will not waste too much time in traffic jams. Towns have larger areas. So, congestion will be less there.
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opine that to
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up the difficulty of
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congestion
or blockage, along with the
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problem
of conveyance, humans should
be uplifted
to settle their
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lives
in metropolitan
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towns
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agree
with this statement
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the
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jams and blockage is growing
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burgeonically
.
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,
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people
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must
migrate to
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big
metropolis
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towns
instead
of surviving in villages and its surroundings.

To commence with,
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traffic
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congestion
is growing
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burgeonically
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because
of advancement in technologies. Every member of the family needs his personal
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vehicle
.
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So
, more the members are, more the number of
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vehicles
will be. They
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use
their personal
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vehicles
for their works, jobs or study, which will
surely
lead to block the road.
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, transportation is
also
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difficult. To cite an epitome, in the year of 1996, a survey had
been conducted
by
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Phillipone
university of America, which resulted that about 70% of the
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traffic
blockage was due to the increasing number of
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vehicles
, which do not
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allow
transportation to pass through it.

Secondly
,
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traffic
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congestion
is a
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very
serious issue or
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problem
, which is
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sometimes
due to the shortage of area.
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, to solve this
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problem
,
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people
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must
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have to
shift to
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big
metropolitan cities.
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that it could be less
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time consuming
.
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should not
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live
in villages
instead
they should migrate to
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big
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towns
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was conducted
in 2009 by Wednesday
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was
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consequented
that 90% of
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people
from villages or outskirts
were migrated
to
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towns
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because
of
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traffic
and
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transportational
problems.

To recapitulate,
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traffic
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congestion
and
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transportational
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problems
can
be solved
by migrating the
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people
to
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towns
. It will be less
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time consuming
and will not waste too much
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time
in
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traffic
jams.
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Towns
have larger areas.
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So
,
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congestion
will be less there.
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IELTS essay Some people think that in a order

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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