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Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience m1LjO
Hosting a multinational sporting events is been seen by many individuals as advantageous, while others believe that its drawbacks are numerous and should be considered. On the one hand, the core benefits of international sports events is that it creates awareness of the country, exposing its hidden treasures and creating jobs for its citizen. While the other group of people believe that it brings about of negative influences to the country, for instance, makes the country relax its crime and sanitation rules. Thereby allowing people from other nationalities live as they which which might influence the citizens of the host country. In my opinion, I strongly believe that hosting such events should be encouraged during to its plethora of benefits. On the one hand, there are about three core reason why hosting an international sporting events is very important. Firstly, it creates awareness of the host country thereby making the making the country more popular and on the headlines. For example, If Togo is going to host the 2025 Olympic games, its assuredly that all the international channels channels keep advertising the country thereby making them popular. Secondly, the rate at which revenues will be generated will be remarkable as all the visitorswho will gain entry into the said country will make use of the services provided by the host country ranging from hotels, restaurants, cinemas clubs and consumer goods. And subsequently more money to the business owners, governments through taxes and jobs for its citizens. For instance, In 2009, its was noticed that the staff strength of all the hotels, bars and restaurants increased by more than 100% during the 2009 world cup in Nigeria as reported by the national dailies. it was also noticed that since more jobs were created, more revenues were also generated for the government. Thirdly, upon arrival of the visitors to the host country, they try to establish relationships with the citizens of the country who in turn introduces the visitors to the available business in which the visitors may likely venture into thereby creating business opportunities and partnerships. For example, During the 2009 Worldcup held in Nigeria, it was recorded by sun online news that about 35% new investors were registered into the mines and Agriculture sectors. On the other hand, the rest of the populace who believe that organising sports events is nott welcomed as its drawbacks are greater than its influence. They say so because they are not sports lovers who believe that all the funds channeled into these events should be used be expended in projects for instance schools, hospitals, roads, other social amenities and human capacity developments programmes. It is also believed however, that certain rules are been relaxed by the host country making people behave anyhow. Moreso, A plethora of other influences includes, dressings, drinking habits, use of slangs and also sexual activities are noticed to be animalistic as the visitors chose to act in any way they like. Thereby leaving the citizens of the host country at the mercy of the already learnt negative lessons. In conclusion, hosting a multinational sports festivals is been seen as a better way of bringing development to a country through the awareness created during the planning stage as believed by many, while others disapprove of this as its is increases crime rate, and a total waste of money and should be discouraged. In my Opinion, I strongly believe that sponsoring such event is very important as it gives certain people opportunities to travel to countries that they may not be opportune to travel to.
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a multinational sporting
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individuals as advantageous, while others
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believe
that its drawbacks are numerous and should
be considered
. On the one hand, the core benefits of international
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sports
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events
is that it creates awareness of the
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country
, exposing its hidden treasures and creating jobs for its
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citizen
. While the
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other
group of
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people
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believe
that it brings about of
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influences
to the
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country
,
for instance
,
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makes
the
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country
relax its crime and sanitation
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rules
.
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allowing
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people
from
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other
nationalities
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live
as they
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which which
might
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influence
the
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citizens
of the
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host
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country
. In my opinion, I
strongly
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believe
that
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hosting
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events
should
be encouraged
during to its plethora of benefits. On the one hand, there are about three core reason why
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hosting
an international sporting
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events
is
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important
.
Firstly
, it creates awareness of the
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host
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country
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thereby
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country
more popular and on the headlines.
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, If Togo is going to
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host
the 2025
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Olympic games
, its
assuredly
that all the international
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channels channels
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keep
advertising the
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country
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thereby
making them popular.
Secondly
, the rate at which revenues will
be generated
will be remarkable as all the
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visitorswho
will gain entry into the said
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country
will
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make
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use
of the services provided by the
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host
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country
ranging from hotels, restaurants, cinemas clubs and consumer
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goods
. And
subsequently
more money to the business owners,
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governments
through taxes and jobs for its
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citizens
.
For instance
, In 2009, its
was noticed
that the staff strength of all the hotels, bars and restaurants increased by more than 100% during the 2009 world cup in Nigeria as reported by the national dailies.
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it
was
also
noticed that since more jobs
were created
, more revenues were
also
generated for the
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government
.
Thirdly
, upon arrival of the
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visitors
to the
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host
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country
, they try to establish relationships with the
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citizens
of the
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country
who in turn introduces the
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visitors
to the available business in which the
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visitors
may likely venture into
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thereby
creating business opportunities and partnerships.
For example
, During the 2009
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Worldcup
held in Nigeria, it
was recorded
by sun online news that about 35% new investors
were registered
into the mines and Agriculture sectors. On the
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other
hand, the rest of the populace who
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believe
that
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organising
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sports
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events
is
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welcomed as its drawbacks are greater than its
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influence
. They say
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so
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because
they are not
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sports
lovers who
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believe
that all the funds channeled into these
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events
should be
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used
be expended
in projects
for instance
schools, hospitals, roads,
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other
social amenities and human capacity developments
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programmes
. It is
also
believed
however
, that certain
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rules
are been
relaxed by the
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host
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country
making
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people
behave anyhow.
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Moreso
, A plethora of
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other
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influences
includes, dressings, drinking habits,
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use
of
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slangs
and
also
sexual activities
are noticed
to be animalistic as the
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visitors
chose to act in any way they like.
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Thereby
leaving the
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citizens
of the
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host
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country
at the mercy of the already
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learnt
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lessons.
In conclusion
,
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hosting
a multinational
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sports
festivals
is been
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seen
as a better way of bringing development to a
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country
through the awareness created during the planning stage as believed by
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many
, while others disapprove of this as its is increases crime rate, and a total waste of money and should
be discouraged
. In my Opinion, I
strongly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that sponsoring such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
as it gives certain
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people
opportunities to travel to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
that they may not be opportune to travel to.

IELTS essay Some people think that hosting an international sports event is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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