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some people think that growth of children is better in cities ,however others opine that countryside is most suitable for children . discuss merits and demerits of both places.

some people think that growth of children is better in cities, however others opine that countryside is most suitable for children. discuss merits and demerits of both places. DoOam
Children are the backbone of every nation. It is said by minority of individuals that city life help in the development of teensgers. However, others believe that village life is perfect for their growth. This essay intends to shed light on both merits and demerits of this development. There are some benefits of city life for the growth of children, the predominant one is, they get all facility without going any other place because urban areas are developed as compared to rural area and proper amenities are not avaliable there. Also, many people come to the city for fulfil their needs. Moreover, they can get b better education which play an important role in their growth and there are numerous schools are opened with good education system, with the help good education they can learn many things and their future will aslo bright. One the other hand, there are few points which are in the favor of countryside life, first one is, clean environment and fresh air. It is very important for the growth of children to breathe toxic free air. In this area there no industries and less traffic also there are few crowded places but in cities people cannot take free air and the environment is polluted by transportation and big industries. Furthermore, in villages mostly people live in joint families and they spend a lot of time with each other. children can learn many things from their elders about their culture and tradition which is very important for children to known it but in cities, people live in nuclear families and all busy inn their lives they are not aware about their customs. In conclusion, it can be said that both areas have pros and cons So, people should try to live in rural areas and give less preference to urban life and they should go there for only work not to settle their.
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Children
are the backbone of every nation. It
is said
by minority of individuals that city
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life
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help
in the development of
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teensgers
.
However
, others believe that village
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life
is perfect for their
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growth
. This essay intends to shed light on both merits and demerits of this development.

There are
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some
benefits of city
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life
for the
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growth
of
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children
, the predominant one is, they
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get
all facility without going any
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other
place
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because
urban
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areas
are developed
as compared to rural
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area
and proper amenities are not
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avaliable
there.
Also
,
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many
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people
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come
to the city for fulfil their needs.
Moreover
, they can
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get
b better education which play an
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important
role in their
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growth
and there are numerous schools
are opened
with
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good
education system, with the
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help
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education they can learn
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many
things and their future will
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aslo
bright.

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the
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other
hand, there are few points which are in the favor of countryside
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life
,
first
one is, clean environment and fresh air. It is
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very
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important
for the
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growth
of
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children
to breathe toxic free air. In this
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area
there no industries and less traffic
also
there are few crowded places
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but
in
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cities
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people
cannot take free air and the environment
is polluted
by transportation and
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big
industries.
Furthermore
, in villages
mostly
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people
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live
in joint
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families and
they spend
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a lot of
time with each
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other
.
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children
can learn
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many
things from their elders about their culture and tradition which is
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very
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important
for
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children
to known it
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but
in
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cities
,
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people
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live
in nuclear families and all busy inn their
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lives
they are not aware about their customs.

In conclusion
, it can
be said
that both
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areas
have pros and cons
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So
,
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people
should try to
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live
in rural
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areas
and give less preference to urban
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life and
they should go there for
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only
work not to settle their.
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IELTS essay some people think that growth of children is better in cities, however others opine that countryside is most suitable for children. discuss merits and demerits of both places.

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  American English
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