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Some people think that government should not Provide international aid since they disadvantaged people unemployed and homeless. Up to what degree do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that government should not Provide international aid since they disadvantaged people unemployed and homeless. Up to what degree PEBVX
Universal aid service which one country provides to other country, as social animal all the countries provide global help to each other. Where, certain people think that government should not give foreign aid as they have disadvantaged humans like unemployment and homelessness in their host people. Up to a large extent I totally disagree this context. This essay will put forward all the points to support my view. First and the foremost thing to give international service is, when an impoverished country is suffering from disasters or some natural calamities. To be more precise, a country which is going through any natural calamities like flood, tsunami and more, need help from other countries to rescue their citizens. Also, sometime the host countries facilitate with some equipments, which are needed. For instance, Spain had sent total 1000 ventilators to India, when covid-19 was spreaded so rapidly in India. Providing these kind of aids shows the humanity among all the countries. In addition, it is so important nowadays to maintain relationship with all the countries. Which, might helps any country to overcome their obstacle. Moreover, another reason is to provide employment to the poor society. To elaborate, as the multi National companies are scattered around the world. They do establish their production houses in a poor homey, which lead to generate more employment in that provincial. Consequently, that lead to economic development of that particular provincial. Also, companies and country both will get benefited, as country will develop and companies can take work from people while paying them lower salaries than their own country. Alternatively, the countries who are facing a problem of unemployment and increased number of homeless people should not provide the help internationally. They should invest more in their region as much as possible to overcome their complication. To elaborate, poor region should minimize their financial help in order to make good infrastructure in their own community, just to give shelter to homeless mankind. However, many of the developed crowd are also suffering from the issues of unemployment and homelessness. To pen down saying that, to assist universal advice portray our culture and humanity. So, there is nothing incorrect to advice each other. It is our responsibility to stand by the rustic which is facing a number of obstacle in development.
Universal aid service which one
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country
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provides
to
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other
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country
, as social animal all the
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countries
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provide
global
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help
to each
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other
. Where, certain
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people
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think
that
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government
should not give foreign aid as they have disadvantaged humans like unemployment and homelessness in their host
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people
. Up to a large extent I
totally
disagree this context. This essay will put forward all the points to support my view.

First
and the foremost thing to give international service is, when an impoverished
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country
is suffering from disasters or
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some
natural calamities. To be more precise, a
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country
which is going through any natural calamities like flood, tsunami and more, need
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help
from
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other
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countries
to rescue their citizens.
Also
, sometime the host
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countries
facilitate with
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some
equipments, which
are needed
.
For instance
, Spain had
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sent
total 1000 ventilators to India, when
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covid-19
was
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spreaded
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so
rapidly
in India. Providing
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these kind
of aids
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shows
the humanity among all the
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countries
.
In addition
, it is
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so
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important
nowadays to maintain relationship with all the
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countries
.
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Which
, might
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helps
any
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country
to overcome their obstacle.

Moreover
, another reason is to
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provide
employment to the poor society. To elaborate, as the multi National
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companies
are scattered
around the world. They do establish their production
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houses
in a poor homey, which lead to generate more employment in that provincial.
Consequently
, that lead to economic development of that particular provincial.
Also
,
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companies
and
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country
both will
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get
benefited, as
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country
will develop and
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companies
can take work from
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people
while paying them lower salaries than their
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own
country.

Alternatively
, the
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countries
who are facing a problem of unemployment and increased number of homeless
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people
should not
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provide
the
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help
internationally
. They should invest more in their region as much as possible to overcome their complication. To elaborate, poor region should minimize their financial
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help
in order to
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make
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good
infrastructure in their
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own
community,
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just
to give shelter to homeless mankind.
However
,
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many
of the developed crowd are
also
suffering from the issues of unemployment and homelessness.

To pen down saying that, to assist universal advice portray our culture and humanity.
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So
, there is nothing incorrect to advice each
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other
. It is our responsibility to stand by the rustic which is facing a number of obstacle in development.
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IELTS essay Some people think that government should not Provide international aid since they disadvantaged people unemployed and homeless. Up to what degree

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