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Some people think that give long prisoner sentence to criminals is good way for reducing crime .others, however,say that there are other alternative available for reducing crime.discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is said by certain individuals the range of crime can be reducing by giving long punishment to offenders, while other section of society deems that there are some other various solutions of this issue available. In my opinion, both prison stances and other measure could be help in reduce crimes. On the one hand, why some folks ponder that provide long prison punishment is the best way for reducing crime. That is why, when guilty spend there time in prison environment then they learn more things about life situations and deal with some difficulties. To put it in other words, nowadays in sentences government provide rehabilitation services to criminals, and they participate in these activities according to their choice of work which contribute to take positive attitude from services, and they reintegrate back into the society. As a result, some people reckon that give long crime punishments is graet way for reduce crimes. Opponents on the other hand argued that, there are some actions for others should be taken by administration to overcome this phenomenon. As, judicial system ought to be make stringent laws for public which means they deter from these laws as well as never commit crime. Additionally, people have fear from stern rules and they automatically abide the law. Consequently, it is also a good way for reducing crime rate in communities. Finally in my opinion, there are numerous other measures are available for reducing the crime rate. To elaborate more, jury provide punishment to delinquent according to severity of the crime namely as life imprisonment, death penality. Not only this, community services provide to criminals who commit minor crimes which helps in developing of skilled works, and education about crimes and they never think about violate the laws. Thus, there are certain measures available for criminals rather than long sentence. To wrap up, although some masses ponder that giving long punishment to offenders is best way for declining the rate of crime. But I still believe that number of various actions taken by government or people could be aid for reducing crime among the globe.
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can be reducing by giving
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punishment
to offenders, while
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other
section of society deems that there are
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some
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other
various solutions of this issue available. In my opinion, both prison stances and
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other
measure could be
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in
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reduce
crimes.

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folks ponder that
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provide
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long
prison
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punishment
is the best way for reducing
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crime
.
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why, when guilty spend there time in prison environment then they learn more things about life situations and deal with
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some
difficulties. To put it in
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other
words, nowadays in sentences
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government
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provide
rehabilitation services to criminals, and they participate in these activities according to their choice of work which contribute to take
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positive
attitude from services, and they reintegrate back into the society.
As a result
,
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some
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people
reckon that give
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long
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crime
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punishments
is
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graet
way for
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reduce
crimes.

Opponents on the
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other
hand argued that, there are
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some
actions for others should
be taken
by administration to overcome this phenomenon. As, judicial system ought to be
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make
stringent
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laws
for public which means they deter from these
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laws
as well
as never commit
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crime
.
Additionally
,
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people
have fear from stern
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rules and
they
automatically
abide the
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law
.
Consequently
, it is
also
a
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good
way for reducing
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crime
rate in communities.

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Finally
in my opinion, there are numerous
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other
measures are available for reducing the
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crime
rate. To elaborate more, jury
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provide
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punishment
to delinquent according to severity of the
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crime
namely
as life imprisonment, death
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penality
. Not
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this, community services
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provide
to criminals who commit minor
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crimes
which
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helps
in developing of skilled works, and education about
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crimes and
they never
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think
about violate the
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laws
.
Thus
, there are certain measures available for criminals
rather
than
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long
sentence.

To wrap up, although
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some
masses ponder that giving
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long
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punishment
to offenders
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is best
way for declining the rate of
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crime
.
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But
I
still
believe that number of various actions taken by
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government
or
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people
could be aid for reducing
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crime
among the globe.
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IELTS essay Some people think that give long prisoner sentence to criminals is good way for reducing crime. others, however, say that there are other alternative available for reducing crime.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
350 words
5.5
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