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Some people think that games play a significant role in the society while other opines that they should taken a paytime activities

Some people think that games play a significant role in the society while other opines that they should taken a paytime activities R2MyM
It is often argue that, some individuals opinion that sports and games play a significant role in society. Whereas, other opine that they should be taken a playtime activities. This essay will intend to analysis both the views along with my prospective. On the one hand, there are so many reasons why people argue that sports are important for society. In other words, when children are play a outdoors games such as cricket, tennis, badminton and so on. These games are aware about who to do the team work and corporate with each other. Kindlers play a any type of game so that automatically growth the body and physical and healthy lifestyle is also more fit. For instance, one survey is conducted by a principal of school in Delhi. They are compulsory the joint a sport class. In fact, each student health fit and fine. Hence, they are no suffer to any disease related to health. On the other hand, some masses believe that sport should be taken as leisure activities give a following reasons. To explain it, only few of people is play a sports and majority only watch them. Watching sports for them just like as, watching a television show a form of entertainment and nothing more. To exampify the board of television channel sport like as T20 and sony plus. Some people go to stadium watch a live match on sport by famous person. Thus, If sports did achieve the goal of making people fit and fine, gyms and fitness centre would not be substantial growth. In conclusion, I believe that sport is considerable role in today's world. Sports events also generate the cities and many cities which have hosted sport events have been considerable investment in public infrastructure.
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a significant role in society.
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reasons why
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for society. In
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outdoors
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games
such as cricket, tennis, badminton and
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on. These
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are aware
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do the team work and corporate with each
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.
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Kindlers
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any type of game
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sport
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. In fact, each student health fit and fine.
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hand,
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masses believe that
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and majority
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for them
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like as T20 and
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go to stadium
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did achieve the goal of making
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fit and fine, gyms and fitness
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would not be substantial growth.
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is considerable role in
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also
generate the cities and
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cities which have hosted
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have been considerable investment in public infrastructure.
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IELTS essay Some people think that games play a significant role in the society while other opines that they should taken a paytime activities

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
292 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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