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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. discuss both views and give your opinion v.8

Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. 8
Nowadays, there is an argument between two groups of people. Some of them agree that children should start schooling as soon as possible while, others disagree and believe that it should not commence until they are aged 7. I believe that later is better. On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why people agree that educating children should be started earlier. Firstly, they believe that sooner a child starts to learn, the better their intelligence will be. This is because they will have a head-start over those who starting later and will fall behind. Another reason is that children will learn to be independent, motivated and competitive as they tend to get the best scores and complete their home works and study on their own. On the other hand, it seems to me that starting formal education at age 7 is the right choice. This is due to the fact that teaching them academic study and trying to beat others simply leads to stress. This is not a good situation for a very young child, who should be encouraged to enjoy their lives. Also focusing on playing programs at home or elsewhere to improve abilities. For example, in some countries such as Finland children start formal education later and they have shown better results in schooling than other countries. Therefore, there is clear evidence of its benefits. In conclusion, I think that children should start school later because they can learn more through playing than formal education. Schooling at an early age does not help to achieve higher grades.
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as possible while, others disagree and believe that it should not commence until they
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that educating
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children
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started
earlier.
Firstly
, they believe that sooner a child
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to learn, the better their intelligence will be. This is
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because
they will have a head-
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start
over those who starting
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later
and will fall behind. Another reason is that
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children
will learn to be independent, motivated and competitive as they tend to
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get
the best scores and complete their home works and study on their
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own
.

On the
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hand, it seems to me that starting formal education at age 7 is the right choice.
This is due to the fact that
teaching them academic study and trying to beat others
simply
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stress
. This is not a
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good
situation for a
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very
young child, who should
be encouraged
to enjoy their
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Also
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improve
abilities.
For example
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some
countries such as Finland
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children
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start
formal education
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later and
they have shown better results in schooling than
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other
countries.
Therefore
, there is
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clear
evidence of its benefits.

In conclusion
, I
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that
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children
should
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start
school
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later
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because
they can learn more through playing than formal education. Schooling at an early age does not
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help
to achieve higher grades.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. 8

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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