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Some people think that fast food is better for health while something opine differently. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that fast food is better for health while something opine differently. ORpXE
Indeed, health plays an indispensable role in everyone's life. There are numerous of individuals who deem that eating fast food is not healthy for masses, infact it is more likely in young younger ones. I completely agree with this statement and it compulsory to explain its reason and disadvantages after giving a final conclusion. To commence with, the reason of increasing popularity of junk food among youngsters mainly because of their home food which is made by their mother is very simple and they eat it on a regular basis. As the result, it creates monotonous as consistently they are eating similar meal, while they know extreme well that it is not good for their health. Alternatively they tend to eat junk food not only because it is delicious taste but also they want to enjoy parties with their friends including expensive fast food. However, junk food is more affordable than other food chain items. Nevertheless, it has plethora of disadvantages. Firstly, it makes masses addicted towards fast food, overeating the junk food can harm immune system of people and produce obesity problems. Even, one of the renowned writer Chetan Bhagat written in his magazine that people should cut the intake of fast food and replace it with some nutritional diet. Secondly, a research predicted that, if masses take fast food rapidly than 80% of individual may have to suffer from fatness diseases and also describe the life expectancy can be lessened, if there is not any change in people's diet plan. Last but not least, higher authorities should be banned this kind of unhealthy food from their nation. In conclusion, undoubtedly, the trend of taking fast food in excess amount is increasing rampantly. It is because of people opt western culture and their food items, lifestyle. Regime should do something productive to prevent their country's people from intake of fast.
Indeed
, health plays an indispensable role in everyone's life. There are numerous of individuals who deem that eating
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fast
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is not healthy for masses,
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infact
it is more likely in young younger ones. I completely
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agree
with this statement and
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it
compulsory to
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explain
its reason and disadvantages after giving a final conclusion.

To commence with, the reason of increasing popularity of
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junk
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food
among youngsters
mainly
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because
of their home
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food
which
is made
by their mother is
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very
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simple and
they eat it on a regular basis. As the result, it creates monotonous as
consistently
they are eating similar meal, while they know extreme well that it is not
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good
for their health.
Alternatively
they tend to eat
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junk
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food
not
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only
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because
it is delicious taste
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but
also
they want to enjoy parties with their friends including expensive
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fast
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food
.
However
,
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junk
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is more affordable than other
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food
chain items.

Nevertheless
, it has plethora of disadvantages.
Firstly
, it
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makes
masses addicted towards
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fast
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food
, overeating the
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junk
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food
can harm immune system of
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people
and produce obesity problems. Even, one of the renowned writer
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Chetan
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Bhagat
written in his magazine that
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people
should
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cut
the intake of
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fast
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food
and replace it with
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some
nutritional diet.
Secondly
,
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a research
predicted that, if masses take
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fast
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rapidly
than 80% of individual may
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have to
suffer from fatness diseases and
also
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describe
the life expectancy can
be lessened
, if there is not any
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change
in
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people
's diet plan.

Last
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but
not least, higher authorities should
be banned
this kind of unhealthy
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food
from their nation.
In conclusion
,
undoubtedly
, the trend of taking
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fast
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food
in excess amount is increasing
rampantly
. It is
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because
of
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people
opt western culture and their
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food
items, lifestyle. Regime should do something productive to
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prevent
their country's
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people
from intake of
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fast
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that fast food is better for health while something opine differently.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
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