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Some people think that environmental problems to be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that environmental problems to be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1
Environmental problems are now affecting everyone's life and now is the time to act else it would be too late. Many would suggest that each nation has its own responsibility because it is pretty hard to interfere and influence other country's policy. However, I think environmental issues are now a global issue and hence it needs to be dealt at global scale. Each country has its own law of land and policies to deal with the problems at hand. Many times the priorities of the problem depends on the financial condition and popularity of a problem among the citizens. Therefore, it is very difficult to work with some countries and make them take certain steps, which is less popular, to curb the situation. On the other hand, environmental issues are not bound by the borders of any country. For example, countries which are most affected by the climate change (melting glaciers) does not have anything under their control. It's a global problem, each country needs to cut their carbon emission else some other country would lose their city. To work together, I believe a global monitoring body should be formed which can regulate the environment policy of all countries and make sure that we all working towards a single goal. In conclusion, it's evident that environmental problem cannot be solved until it's handled at the country's level. Also, there are plenty of challenges to ensure that each country is responsible and accountable towards environmental issues. But challenges can be solved by including powerful countries in the core group and regulate each country's policy for problem which does not respect boundaries.
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affecting everyone's life and
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would suggest that each nation has its
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own
responsibility
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it is pretty
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hard
to interfere and influence other country's
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policy
.
However
, I
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think
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environmental
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issues
are
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now
a
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global
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issue
and
hence
it needs to
be dealt
at
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global
scale.

Each
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country
has its
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own
law of land and
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policies
to deal with the
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problems
at hand.
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Many
times the priorities of the
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problem
depends on the financial condition and popularity of a
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problem
among the citizens.
Therefore
, it is
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very
difficult to work with
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some
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countries
and
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make
them take certain steps, which is less popular, to curb the situation.

On the other hand
,
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environmental
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issues
are not bound by the borders of any
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country
.
For example
,
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countries
which are most
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affected
by the climate
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change
(melting glaciers) does not have anything under their control. It's a
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global
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problem
, each
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country
needs to
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cut
their carbon emission else
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some
other
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country
would lose their city. To work together, I believe a
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global
monitoring body should
be formed
which can regulate the environment
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policy
of all
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countries
and
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make
sure that we all working towards a single goal.

In conclusion
, it's evident that
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environmental
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problem
cannot
be solved
until it's handled at the country's level.
Also
, there are
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plenty
of challenges to ensure that each
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country
is responsible and accountable towards
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environmental
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issues
.
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But
challenges can
be solved
by including powerful
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countries
in the core group and regulate each country's
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policy
for
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problem
which does not respect boundaries.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems to be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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