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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.19

Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. 19
Although it is often believed that environmental issues ought to be resolved globally, some people think that solving them within a country is more proper. In my opinion, I consider that dealing with problems nationally makes a country to be independent, enhances their recognition and reduces their debts. On the one hand, taking care of environmental problems on a national scale strengthens a country, and makes her to become independent and I agree. For instance, it helps countries to know and understand their capabilities, and thus, prepares and strengthen them for future cases. Moreover, taking care of an issue by a nation can enhance their recognition internationally. To illustrate, the Nigerian government, in 2013/2014 was able to fight and eradicate Ebola disease without any support internationally, thereby becoming recognised worldwide, and some countries now seek their assistance whenever there is an epidemic. Finally, there would be reduced debts for countries who do not always seek help abroad. This is because getting solutions on a global scale requires much funding. On the other hand, some believe that some countries are very poor and therefore cannot deal with many difficult conditions. In other words, resolving most difficulties on a global scale would mean a great support for such countries, hence, enhancing their growth. For example, if the outbreak of Ebola in Liberia was tackled globally, it would not have spread to other countries and claiming the lives of many important persons such as Dr. Edith Adedayoo. Furthermore, corruptions in most developing countries, causes a delay in dealing with some difficult situations. To explain further, corrupt leaders usually appoint their fellows to work with, thus, embezzling most of the money allocated to granting solution to some issues without any query. This is not obtainable when the globe is involved. In conclusion, notwithstanding people's varied opinions, I consider being free of debts, independence and worldwide recognition as good reasons why environmental conditions should be solved within the nation.
Although it is
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often
believed that environmental issues ought to
be resolved
globally,
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some
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people
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think
that solving them within a
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country
is more proper. In my opinion, I consider that dealing with problems
nationally
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makes
a
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country
to be independent, enhances their recognition and
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reduces
their debts.

On the one hand, taking care of environmental problems on a national scale strengthens a
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country
, and
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makes
her to become independent and I
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agree
.
For instance
, it
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helps
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countries
to know and understand their capabilities, and
thus
, prepares and strengthen them for future cases.
Moreover
, taking care of an issue by a nation can enhance their recognition
internationally
. To illustrate, the Nigerian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, in 2013/2014 was able to fight and eradicate Ebola disease without any support
internationally
, thereby becoming
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recognised
worldwide, and
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some
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countries
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now
seek their assistance whenever there is an epidemic.
Finally
, there would be
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reduced
debts for
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countries
who do not always seek
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help
abroad. This is
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because
getting solutions on a global scale requires much funding.

On the other hand
,
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some
believe that
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some
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countries
are
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very
poor and
therefore
cannot deal with
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many
difficult conditions.
In other words
, resolving most difficulties on a global scale would mean a great support for such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
hence
, enhancing their growth.
For example
, if the outbreak of Ebola in Liberia
was tackled
globally, it would not have spread to other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
and claiming the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of
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many
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important
persons such as Dr. Edith
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Adedayoo
.
Furthermore
, corruptions in most developing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
, causes a delay in dealing with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
difficult situations. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
further
, corrupt leaders
usually
appoint their fellows to work with,
thus
, embezzling most of the money allocated to granting solution to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
issues without any query. This is not obtainable when the globe
is involved
.

In conclusion
, notwithstanding
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people
's varied opinions, I consider being free of debts, independence and worldwide recognition as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
reasons why environmental conditions should
be solved
within the nation.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while others believe it is better to deal with them nationally. 19

Essay
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4 paragraphs
324 words
8.5
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