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Some people think that environmental problems is cause due to the loss of plants and animals. Other think that is cause by other factors.

Some people think that environmental problems is cause due to the loss of plants and animals. Other think that is cause by other factors. VyDdQ
It is generally reckoned by some individuals that the environment is degraded by the extinction of flora and fauna; other contradict by saying that the environment is destroyed due to other causes. According to my perspective, the environment is degraded due to rising pollution and global warming. Proponents of first view hold the opinion of plants and animals due yo numerous uses, owing in the contemporary era, the hunting is admired by myriad people; they either do this for distinct experiment, or they want to get body parts of the animals. As a result the various animals such as tigers, lions are on the line of extinction. That is why, the balance of the earth is not properly maintained; the life cycle is totally destroyed. Probing ahead, the variety of one animals is rising day by day and others are declining. A good example of this is the Africa is the habitat of distinct plants and animals; but due to the increasing greed of homo sapiens 30% of animals had been lost their life every year, according to the 'Animals Extinction Report'. Hence, it is clearly evident that the loss of fauna is the predominant cause of environment degradation. Opponents of the foremost view support the other factors such as global warming and pollution, for the reason the deforestation is surging day by day, that not only increases the temperature of the earth, but also causes cancer, because the ultraviolet rays of the sunlight are not reflected back from the surface of the earth due to rhe rising pollution. Also, the plastics are used by humans in their daily life, these things neither get decomposed, nor these are burnt as it causes abundance of air pollution that causes breathing problems. For instance, all nations such as India, America, Australia have prohibited the use of plastic as it has numerous side affects, according to 'World Times Report'. Therefore, it is clear from the above that global warming also contributes to environment degradation. To conclude, I believe the above mentioned reasons are evident to state that the animals extinction is not the only factor that contribute in the environment problems, but the global warming and use of detrimental products also contribute to environmental degradation.
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environment
is degraded
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extinction
of flora and fauna;
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other
contradict by saying that the
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environment
is
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destroyed
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other
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causes
. According to my perspective, the
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environment
is degraded
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due
to rising
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pollution
and
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global
warming.

Proponents of
first
view hold the opinion of plants and
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animals
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due
yo numerous
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uses
, owing in the contemporary era, the hunting
is admired
by myriad
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people
; they either do this for distinct experiment, or they want to
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get
body parts of the
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animals
.
As a result
the various
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animals
such as tigers, lions are on the line of
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extinction
.
That is
why, the balance of the earth is not
properly
maintained; the life cycle is
totally
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destroyed
. Probing ahead, the variety of one
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animals
is rising day by day
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and others
are declining. A
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good
example of this is the Africa is the habitat of distinct plants and
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animals
;
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but
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due
to the increasing greed of homo sapiens 30% of
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animals
had
been lost
their
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life
every year, according to the 'Animals
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Extinction
Report'.
Hence
, it is
clearly
evident that the loss of fauna is the predominant
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cause
of
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environment
degradation.

Opponents of the foremost view support the
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other
factors such as
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global
warming and
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pollution
, for the reason the deforestation is surging day by day, that not
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only
increases the temperature of the earth,
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but
also
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causes
cancer,
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because
the ultraviolet rays of the sunlight are not reflected back from the surface of the earth
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due
to
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rising
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pollution
.
Also
, the plastics are
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used
by humans in their daily life, these things neither
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get
decomposed, nor these
are burnt
as it
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causes
abundance of air
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pollution
that
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causes
breathing problems.
For instance
, all nations such as India, America, Australia have prohibited the
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use
of plastic as it has numerous
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side affects
, according to 'World Times Report'.
Therefore
, it is
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clear
from the above that
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global
warming
also
contributes to
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environment
degradation.

To conclude
, I believe the above mentioned reasons are evident to state that the
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animals
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extinction
is not the
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only
factor that contribute in the
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environment
problems,
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but
the
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global
warming and
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use
of detrimental products
also
contribute to environmental degradation.
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems is cause due to the loss of plants and animals. Other think that is cause by other factors.

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