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In many countries, students take a year gap after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v.1

In many countries, students take a year gap after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v. 1
Taking a gap year off between high school and the university has become a popular choice for many students. There are a number of common ways they utilise this time; such as travelling abroad, volunteering or working. I personally believe that this kind of experience should be recommended to students more actively since they can offer youngsters several benefits. Spending time outside of school indicates that students can encounter opportunities to interact with people who they are not used to communicating with. Foreigners they meet while travelling overseas or colleagues from volunteering and work enable them to develop exceptional social skills to talk to others with cultural, racial or age differences. Such experiences can subsequently motivate them to be a more confident and outgoing person, which is believed to help them establish a solid social network. Another distinctive advantage that a gap year break can give to students is a time to try out different types of practical work. Many teenagers graduate from high school without having clear occupational plans. However, participating in work experience programs or working part-time before starting university can broaden their perspectives on career choices. An exemplary case can be illustrated by looking at my sister, who spent six months teaching English in Cambodia during her gap year. While she was looking after the disadvantaged local kids, she developed a desire to work for international charity organisations and she enrolled in an international studies degree. In conclusion, I am convinced that the society should encourage more high school graduates because the process of establishing social skills and trials on different jobs can provide them with invaluable life experiences.
Taking a gap year off between high
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school
and the university has become a popular choice for
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many
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students
. There are a number of common ways they
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utilise
this time; such as travelling abroad, volunteering or working. I
personally
believe that this kind of
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experience
should
be recommended
to
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students
more
actively
since they can offer youngsters several benefits.

Spending time outside of
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school
indicates that
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students
can encounter opportunities to interact with
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people
who they are not
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used
to communicating with. Foreigners they
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meet
while travelling overseas or colleagues from volunteering and
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work
enable them to develop exceptional social
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skills
to talk to others with cultural, racial or age differences. Such
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experiences
can
subsequently
motivate them to be a more confident and outgoing person, which
is believed
to
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help
them establish a solid social network.

Another distinctive advantage that a gap year break can give to
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students
is a time to try out
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different
types of practical
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work
.
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Many
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teenagers
graduate from high
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school
without having
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clear
occupational plans.
However
, participating in
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work
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experience
programs or working part-time
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before
starting university can broaden their perspectives on career choices. An exemplary case can
be illustrated
by looking at my sister, who spent six months teaching English in Cambodia during her gap year. While she was looking after the disadvantaged local kids, she developed a desire to
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work
for international charity
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organisations and
she enrolled in an international studies degree.

In conclusion
, I
am convinced
that the society should encourage more high
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school
graduates
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because
the process of establishing social
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skills
and trials on
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different
jobs can provide them with invaluable life
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experiences
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
If we spoke a different language, we would perceive a somewhat different world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay In many countries, students take a year gap after finishing school and work or travel during this period. Should students take a gap year before attending universities? What are the advantages and disadvantages of it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.5
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