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Some people think that economic development is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

Some people think that economic development is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. v. 3
Some people say that economic growth can eradicate poverty. Others opine that economic development causes environmental damage and hence it should be discouraged. In my opinion, environmental protection is of paramount importance and hence economic growth should be restricted. A good reason to stop economic growth is to protect the environment from getting polluted by its harmful by-products. In other words, economic growth needs the establishment of many factories which emit obnoxious gases into the atmosphere and discharge other pollutants into the soil and water. If untreated, these by-products cause huge environmental complications. For instance, the demand for electricity rises due to high economic growth; the majority of power plants in the world use fossil fuels to produce electricity and thus cause considerable damage to the environment. Another critical reason to protect the environment and discourage economic growth is the lack of any substantial evidence to prove that economic growth eradicates poverty. To put it in another way, billions of people are still living under poverty even after many decades of economic development, casting doubt on the role of economic growth in removing poverty. For example, years of economic growth has made rich people richer and poor people are still struggling for the basic necessities of life. Moreover, with the advancement of technologies less manual work is required in factories and hence fewer job opportunities are available although economy is developing. Obviously, economic growth chiefly benefits the affluent and does hardly anything for the poorest sections of the society. In conclusion, sacrificing the environment for the sake of economic development is not a wise step, especially, when it is doubtful whether economic development can eradicate poverty.
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. Others opine that
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causes environmental damage and
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is to protect the environment from getting polluted by its harmful by-products.
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economic
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growth
needs the establishment of
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factories which emit obnoxious gases into the atmosphere and discharge other pollutants into the soil and water. If untreated, these by-products cause huge environmental complications.
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, the demand for electricity rises due to high
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economic
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growth
; the majority of power plants in the world
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use
fossil fuels to produce electricity and
thus
cause considerable damage to the environment.

Another critical reason to protect the environment and discourage
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economic
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is the lack of any substantial evidence to prove that
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eradicates
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poverty
. To put it in another way, billions of
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even after
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decades of
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, casting doubt on the role of
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economic
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growth
in removing
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poverty
.
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has made rich
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richer and poor
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still
struggling for the
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basic necessities
of life.
Moreover
, with the advancement of technologies less manual work
is required
in factories and
hence
fewer job opportunities are available although economy is developing.
Obviously
,
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economic
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growth
chiefly
benefits the affluent and does hardly anything for the poorest sections of the society.

In conclusion
, sacrificing the environment for the sake of
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economic
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development
is not a wise step,
especially
, when it is doubtful whether
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economic
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development
can eradicate
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poverty
.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that economic development is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
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