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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment.

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. MRa9
With environmental concerns growing continually in the last few decades, the question of what each country can do to protect the environment has become more and more prominent. Some people believe that all countries around the world are equally responsible when it comes to combating climate change. Others, however, think that developed countries have a greater responsibility than developing countries. It is indubitable that climate change is a universal, global problem; therefore, any solution to it will need to be on a global scale, too. Furthermore, developing countries are more likely to suffer as a result of climate change, so they should be just as motivated as developed countries to help the environment. On the other hand, developed countries are clearly wore capable of taking the lead in combating climate change and improving their carbon footprint, as they have fewer pressing concerns than developing countries. Not only that, but they are also going to have a more marked effect if they reduce their emissions, since developed nations have always been far ahead in terms of pollution, and are in fact mostly to blame for it. Finally, developed countries have the responsibility to set the example for others, introducing changes to encourage the rest to do the same. Therefore, I firmly believe that while every country should be accountable for their emissions and contribute to combating climate change, developed countries have a slightly bigger responsibility to take action than developing countries, as they have both the means and the reasons to do so, as well as the ability to create a formidable wave of change in attitudes towards the environment around the world.
With environmental concerns growing
continually
in the last few decades, the question of what each
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country
can do to protect the environment has become more and more prominent.
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believe that all
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countries
around the world are
equally
responsible when it
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comes
to combating
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climate
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change
. Others,
however
,
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think
that
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developed
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countries
have a greater responsibility than
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developing
countries.

It is indubitable that
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climate
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change
is a universal, global problem;
therefore
, any solution to it will need to be on a global scale, too.
Furthermore
,
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developing
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countries
are more likely to suffer
as a result
of
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climate
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change
,
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so
they should be
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just
as motivated as
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developed
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countries
to
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help
the environment.

On the other hand
,
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developed
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countries
are
clearly
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capable of taking the lead in combating
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climate
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change
and improving their carbon footprint, as they have fewer pressing concerns than
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developing
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countries
. Not
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only
that,
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they are
also
going to have a more marked effect if they
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reduce
their emissions, since
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developed
nations have always been far ahead in terms of pollution, and are in fact
mostly
to blame for it.
Finally
,
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developed
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countries
have the responsibility to set the example for others, introducing
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changes
to encourage the rest to do the same.

Therefore
, I
firmly
believe that while every
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country
should be accountable for their emissions and contribute to combating
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climate
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change
,
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developed
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countries
have a
slightly
bigger responsibility to take action than
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developing
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countries
, as they have both the means and the reasons to do
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so
,
as well
as the ability to create a formidable wave of
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change
in attitudes towards the environment around the world.

IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
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