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Some people think that couples should live together before getting married to start knowing each other better and see if they are compatible Others say that because of this tendency people become immoral and only deep emotional attachment makes a durable v.2

Some people think that couples should live together before getting married to start knowing each other better and see if they are compatible Others say that because of this tendency people become immoral and only deep emotional attachment makes a durable v. 2
Number of people is increasing each year and, as many forecasts show, it could be 2-4 billion more than it is now. This essay completely agrees that such trend is one of the biggest problems because more people will have a bigger environmental burden, and, also, humans could suffer from shortage of food and clean water to ensure all their necessities. Environmental pollution is an outcome of people’s vital activity, so it will be heavier due to population increasing. Technology gives people a lot of opportunities to produce almost everything they would like to have. In fact, people use an achieved progress in a very reckless manner, and that is why amount of waste is getting bigger daily, quantity of automobiles which pollute an air is increasing. Therefore, environmental state completely correlates with the number of people in a concrete area. For example, researchers have shown that those urban areas in Ukraine, which have become at least 30% more populated have 20% worse ecology than it was. Food and clean water are the basis for human existence. Bigger population demand more food, consequently, it will be necessary to use more lands for all sorts of food producing, but appropriate lands are limited. Additionally, the level of the Global Ocean is getting higher, so we will have less land than now. As well as food, there will be a lack of clean water which are used not just for drinking but for goods producing. For instance, some settlements in Africa are already endangered because of the clean water deficit. To conclude, overpopulation causes fundamental problems related to detrimental impact on the environment and insufficient amount of food and water. It is the greatest challenge faced by humanity to find effective solution how to save livable conditions in case of a growing population.
Number of
people
is increasing each year and, as
many
forecasts
show
, it could be 2-4 billion more than it is
now
. This essay completely
agrees
that such trend is one of the biggest problems
because
more
people
will have a bigger environmental burden, and,
also
, humans could suffer from shortage of
food
and
clean
water
to ensure all their necessities.

Environmental pollution is an outcome of
people’s
vital activity,
so
it will be heavier due to population increasing. Technology gives
people
a lot of
opportunities to produce almost everything they would like to have. In fact,
people
use
an achieved progress in a
very
reckless manner, and
that is
why amount of waste is getting bigger daily, quantity of automobiles which pollute an air is increasing.
Therefore
, environmental state completely correlates with the number of
people
in a concrete area.
For example
, researchers have shown that those urban areas in Ukraine, which have become at least 30% more populated have 20% worse ecology than it was.

Food and
clean
water
are the basis for human existence. Bigger population demand more
food
,
consequently
, it will be necessary to
use
more lands for all sorts of
food
producing,
but
appropriate lands
are limited
.
Additionally
, the level of the Global Ocean is getting higher,
so
we will have less land than
now
.
As well
as
food
, there will be a lack of
clean
water
which are
used
not
just
for drinking
but
for
goods
producing.
For instance
,
some
settlements in Africa are already endangered
because
of the
clean
water
deficit.

To conclude
, overpopulation causes fundamental problems related to detrimental impact on the environment and insufficient amount of
food
and
water
. It is the greatest challenge faced by humanity to find effective solution how to save livable conditions in case of a growing population.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that couples should live together before getting married to start knowing each other better and see if they are compatible Others say that because of this tendency people become immoral and only deep emotional attachment makes a durable v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Grammatical Range: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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