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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. xN76
In most of the countries, climatic change creates a major effect on many of the businesses in both positive and negative ways. This essay is going to discuss about both views and going to depict the optimistic opinion about the climatic behavior. Some of the countries has nominal season changes. Others have a huge impact on both summer and winter. Firstly, due to high temperature that people are not willing to spend their vacation outside the house and workplace. As they concerned about the sunny, they might think about the effects of heat for older people. Secondly, public are very curious to play in snow. However, that also creates a major issue to go out for their daily activities due to snow storms. So that most of the business and tourists places loses their income due to these type of natural climatic changes. On the other hand, online businesses are becoming popular during these type of scenarios. Nowadays people have the option to place their necessary things online as per their convenience. It shows the positive effect to grow our businesses. I would suggest that all entrepreneurs must have their online website with secure payment and delivering the items to the needy people in these difficult situations. Due to that, they could retain their market with other competitors. Finally, I conclude that climatic changes never impact the businesses. We should be prepared to provide the alternative solutions in such cases. Offering discounts encourages people to buy things regularly without losing our loyal customers.
In most of the countries,
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climatic
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change
creates a major effect on
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many
of the
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businesses
in both
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positive
and
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negative
ways. This essay is going to
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discuss about both
views and going to depict the optimistic opinion about the
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climatic
behavior.

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Some of the
countries has nominal season
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changes
. Others have a huge impact on both summer and winter.
Firstly
,
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due
to high temperature that
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people
are not willing to spend their vacation outside the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and workplace. As they concerned about the sunny, they might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about the effects of heat for older
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people
.
Secondly
, public are
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very
curious to play in snow.
However
, that
also
creates a major issue to go out for their daily activities
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due
to snow storms.
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So
that most of the
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business
and tourists places loses their income
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due
to these type of natural
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climatic
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changes
.

On the other hand
, online
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businesses
are becoming popular during these type of scenarios. Nowadays
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people
have the option to place their necessary things online as per their convenience. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effect to grow our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
. I would suggest that all entrepreneurs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have their online website with secure payment and delivering the items to the needy
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people
in these difficult situations.
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Due
to that, they could retain their market with other competitors.

Finally
, I conclude that
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climatic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
never impact the
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businesses
. We should
be prepared
to provide the alternative solutions in such cases. Offering discounts encourages
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
things
regularly
without losing our loyal customers.
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IELTS essay Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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