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Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.(question)

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. (question) RaM8
Environment issues are not restricted by boundaries and climate change is one of them, which is faced by the whole world. There has split opinions regarding on climate change, with some favour it by saying that it helps to generate many kinds of opportunities for business sector, while others opine that it has only detrimental effects on business. Therefore, before arriving on my stands both viewpoint are discuss further. Discussing the former opinion, some group of people argue that variations in climate brings more positive outcomes. The foremost one is that it creates good opportunities for industries. To put simply, climate change force to manufacturers invest to invent a eco-friendly products, which creates less carbon intensive and unable to help society taking. Tesla is an example, Tesla is become a leading electric car manufacturer in the whole world and Elon Musk being a world's richest person by made an electric car. Besides this, it helps to boost net profit of business. By this I mean that change in weather means change in people's need. For instance, when climate change from winter to summer, demands of commodities like light-clothes, cold-drinks and electric appliances such as, air conditioner and refrigerator would be significantly rise up, the demand of various things allows local companies to flourish thier business and generate a huge amount of profit, as a result economy of that particular country or region would be increase. On the paradoxical side, some contend and perceived that change in Metro logic condition has detrimental consequences. Out of all the negatives, the foremost one is it creates obstacles for farmers and local shopkeeper. To put into other words, agricultural activities are highly dependent upon whether without particular atmosphere group would not be grow. Taking India as an example, from five years due to drastically change in climate farmers face the huge loss in agriculture, as a result suicide rate has been increasing among farmer. Add to this, Climate change also brings natural calamities like typhoon and tsunami. An apt example of this is Himachal Pradesh due to Tsunami, approximately 1 lakh shopkeepers faced a huge loss. To recapitulate, even though some people believe that change in Environmental condition creates for farmers as well as local shopkeepers, I perceive that its positives are enormously much higher than its negative like it generate opportunities for manufacture and helps to boost economy of a country or region.
Environment issues are not restricted by boundaries and
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climate
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change
is one of them, which
is faced
by the whole world. There has split opinions regarding on
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climate
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change
, with
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some
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favour
it by saying that it
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helps
to generate
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many
kinds of opportunities for
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business
sector, while others opine that it has
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only
detrimental effects on
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business
.
Therefore
,
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before
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arriving on
my stands both viewpoint are
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discuss
further
.

Discussing the former opinion,
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some
group of
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people
argue that variations in
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climate
brings more
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positive
outcomes. The foremost one is that it
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creates
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good
opportunities for industries. To put
simply
,
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climate
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change
force to manufacturers invest to invent
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a
eco-friendly
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products
, which
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creates
less carbon intensive and unable to
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help
society taking. Tesla is an example, Tesla
is become
a leading electric car manufacturer in the whole world and Elon Musk being a world's richest person by made an electric car.
Besides
this, it
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helps
to boost net profit of
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business
. By this I mean that
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change
in weather means
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change
in
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people
's need.
For instance
, when
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climate
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change
from winter to summer, demands of commodities like light-clothes,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
-drinks and electric appliances such as, air conditioner and refrigerator would be
significantly
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rise
up, the demand of various things
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allows
local
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companies
to flourish
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thier
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business
and generate a huge amount of profit,
as a result
economy of that particular country or region would be increase.

On the paradoxical side,
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some
contend and perceived that
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change
in Metro logic condition has detrimental consequences. Out of all the negatives, the foremost one is it
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creates
obstacles for
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farmers
and local shopkeeper. To put into other words, agricultural activities are
highly
dependent upon whether without particular atmosphere group would not be
Consider using a past participle here: "grown".
grow
. Taking India as an example, from five years due to
drastically
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change
in
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climate
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farmers
face the huge loss in agriculture,
as a result
suicide rate has been increasing among
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farmer
.
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Add
to this,
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Climate
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change
also
brings natural calamities like typhoon and tsunami. An apt example of this is Himachal Pradesh due to Tsunami, approximately 1 lakh shopkeepers faced a huge loss.

To recapitulate,
even though
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some
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people
believe that
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change
in Environmental condition
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creates
for
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farmers
as well
as local shopkeepers, I perceive that its positives are
enormously
much higher than its
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negative
like it generate opportunities for manufacture and
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helps
to boost economy of a country or region.
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IELTS essay Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. (question)

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400 words
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