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Today’s parents spend too little time staying with their children and use television to make their children keep quiet. Explain the reason and results by using your relevant experience.

Today’s parents spend too little time staying with their children and use television to make their children keep quiet. Explain the reason and results by using your relevant experience. 12eN
Nowadays, responsibility parent’s to children are just replaced by social media entertainment. This essay will discuss the effects on life in the situation with the actions after parent’s taken. Although, parents feel tired after arrived home, it is such a little free time needs segregate into two parts for children and their own. And the attitude of the parents recently are totally differences in the past. However, they are more focus on themselves rather than children in anytime anyway. Younger parents now addictive with social media like facebook which really immerse into the screen and unfortunately terrible incident happen. For instance, A mother has been watched TV programme when the child eaten inedible things then casuistry death case happened. Various type of similarities case had been happened before. On the other hand, attitude of the children after grow up become adults is influenced since in the childhood time. For example, a child had beaten their parents because forgot given money to them. The morality and self-independent are strongly detrimental in their life like situation occur mentioned as above. Without moral, various severe horrible things can foresee in their society. This is sarcastic for the families relationship have been broke down due to spent fewer time communicate with them even though parent are swamped in work still need allocate time properly for children. To sum up it, the various fierce consequences of the parents take care their children are only spent in fewer time. However, it can cause destroy the regulation in society ahead if the consideration haven't take immediately.
Nowadays, responsibility
parent’s
to
children
are
just
replaced by social media entertainment. This essay will discuss the effects on life in the situation with the actions after
parent’s
taken.

Although,
parents
feel tired after arrived home, it is such a
little
free
time
needs segregate into two parts for
children
and their
own
. And the attitude of the
parents
recently are
totally
differences in the past.
However
, they are more focus on themselves
rather
than
children
in anytime anyway. Younger
parents
now
addictive with social media like
facebook
which
really
immerse into the screen and unfortunately terrible incident happen.
For instance
, A mother has been
watched
TV
programme
when the child eaten inedible things then casuistry death case happened. Various type of similarities case had
been happened
before
.

On the other hand
, attitude of the
children
after grow up become adults
is influenced
since in the childhood
time
.
For example
, a child had beaten their
parents
because
forgot
given
money to them. The morality and self-independent are
strongly
detrimental in their life like situation occur mentioned as above. Without moral, various severe horrible things can foresee in their society. This is sarcastic for the
families
relationship have been broke down due to spent fewer
time
communicate with them
even though
parent
are swamped
in work
still
need allocate
time
properly
for children.

To sum up it, the various fierce consequences of the
parents
take care their
children
are
only
spent in fewer
time
.
However
, it can cause
destroy
the regulation in society ahead if the consideration
haven't take
immediately.
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IELTS essay Today’s parents spend too little time staying with their children and use television to make their children keep quiet. Explain the reason and results by using your relevant experience.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
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