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Some people think that children should spend their time at school on summer holiday to learn new skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should spend their time at school on summer holiday to learn new skills. yPR2r
It goes without saying in this sophisticated and progressive ear in which are living, school plays an important part in every student's life. There has always been a controversy among people whether students should participate in the summer classes or not and the regular seasons are enough for gaining skills. As far as I am concemed, I hold the opinion that students should enjoy their summer holidays and relax in their homes. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder. The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children are facing a lot of stresses at school during other seasons. It is crystal clear that like the other people, students need some time for relaxation and summer is the best time for releasing the school's stress and having a refresh. What is more, having too much pressure on a child can create a negative feeling about school in their minds and may even this feeling reach to hating and affects the student's performance in the school. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home. When my brother was in high school, during the year he didn't have any leisure time and he couldn't even spend time with his family and kelatives. So, he started to hate the high school and he changed it just because he had to participate in the summer classes too! The second equally significant reason which is worth mentioning is that summer classes in the schools are a kind of wasting time. It is usually a platform for the school owners to be able to carn more money and get more tuition from the student's family. They only care about their income and as a result, students should participate in bad-scheduled and non-purpose classes in the summer. For instance, although every year in Iran a lot of students leam about cars and roboties in summer schools, in the end, none of them can even remember one word from that lesson. This fact has happened based on a lack of existing a good plan for students. In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that students must rest in the summer instead of spending time at school. This is because they face a lot of pressure in the year and they need a specifie time for relaxation and also the quality of the summer classes is very low.
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school
plays an
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important
part in every student's life. There has always been a controversy among
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people
whether
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students
should participate in the
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summer
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classes
or not and the regular seasons are
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enough
for gaining
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skills
. As far as I am
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concemed
, I hold the opinion that
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students
should enjoy their
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summer
holidays and relax in their homes. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint
are elaborated
upon hereunder. The
first
exquisite point to
be mentioned
is that children are facing
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a lot of
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stresses
at
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school
during other seasons. It is crystal
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clear
that like the other
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people
,
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students
need
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some
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time
for relaxation and
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summer
is the best
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time
for releasing the school's
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stress
and having a refresh.
What is more
, having too much pressure on a child can create a
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negative
feeling about
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school
in their minds and may even this feeling reach to hating and affects the student's performance in the
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school
. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home. When my brother was in high
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school
, during the year he didn't have any leisure
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time and
he couldn't even spend
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time
with his family and
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kelatives
.
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So
, he
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started
to hate the high
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school and
he
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changed
it
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because
he had to participate in the
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summer
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classes
too! The second
equally
significant reason which is worth mentioning is that
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summer
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classes
in the
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schools
are a kind of wasting
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time
. It is
usually
a platform for the
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school
owners to be able to
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carn
more money and
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get
more tuition from the student's family. They
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only
care about their income and
as a result
,
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students
should participate in
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bad
-scheduled and non-purpose
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classes
in the
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summer
.
For instance
, although every year in Iran
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a lot of
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students
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leam
about cars and
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roboties
in
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summer
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schools
, in the
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end
, none of them can even remember one word from that lesson. This fact has happened based on a lack of existing a
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good
plan for
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students
.
In conclusion
, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that
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students
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must
rest in the
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summer
instead
of spending
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time
at
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school
. This is
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because
they face
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a lot of
pressure in the
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year and
they need a
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specifie
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time
for relaxation and
also
the quality of the
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summer
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classes
is
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should spend their time at school on summer holiday to learn new skills.

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