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Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it.

Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. BlaE5
Crime is unquestionably one of the most prevailing and worrying aspects in any society, and its prevention should be taken seriously. Crime prevention can be executed in various ways, firstly through a sustained honest presence in the community and secondly through international cooperation. A local presence by incorruptible law enforcement authorities may be costly, however, the long-term investment would pay dividends in the future. A safer region would encourage trade, investment and set an invaluable example for younger generations. For example, crime has dramatically been reduced in the Favelas around Rio de Janiero in Brazil. This was achieved largely through the government committing large funds of money to stationing police headquarters in and around the slums. These financial expenditures greatly benefited the community. Secondly, due to the large-scale severity and the global impact that crime has in some areas of the world, global cooperation is critical. Operating in a different way would incur significant financial losses and render any expenditure futile. For example, Somalian pirates in Africa have reigned terror amongst many ocean transport companies in the area. Only through large-scale international cooperation was policing the area possible. Therefore, crime reduction can be attributed to a joint effort between countries. To conclude, illegal activities are a costly and dangerous fact in the present global economy; however, through large-scale government investment prevention is an attainable goal. Also, spreading the expense through international cooperation the resources invested can be significantly more effective in reducing criminals’ effectiveness abroad.
Crime
is
unquestionably
one of the most prevailing and worrying aspects in any society, and its prevention should
be taken
seriously
.
Crime
prevention can
be executed
in various ways,
firstly
through
a sustained honest presence in the community and
secondly
through
international cooperation.

A local presence by incorruptible law enforcement authorities may be costly,
however
, the long-term investment would pay dividends in the future. A safer region would encourage trade, investment and set an invaluable example for younger generations.

For example
,
crime
has
dramatically
been
reduced
in the
Favelas
around Rio de Janiero in Brazil. This
was achieved
largely
through
the
government
committing large funds of money to stationing police headquarters in and around the slums. These financial expenditures
greatly
benefited the community.

Secondly
, due to the large-scale severity and the global impact that
crime
has in
some
areas of the world, global cooperation is critical. Operating in a
different
way would incur significant financial losses and render any expenditure futile.

For example
,
Somalian
pirates in Africa have reigned terror amongst
many
ocean transport
companies
in the area.
Only
through
large-scale international cooperation was policing the area possible.
Therefore
,
crime
reduction can
be attributed
to a joint effort between countries.

To conclude
, illegal activities are a costly and
dangerous
fact in the present global economy;
however
,
through
large-scale
government
investment prevention is an attainable goal.
Also
, spreading the expense
through
international cooperation the resources invested can be
significantly
more effective in reducing criminals’ effectiveness abroad.
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IELTS essay Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it.

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