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Some people think that children should not take

Some people think that children should not take KYR96
I partially agree with this statement, and I will explain my point in the following paragraphs, citing some affirmative reasons. Fast food is very convenient and cheap on hand and saves a lot of our time. In our fast-paced world, 65 percent of people now consume fast food, and as these numbers continue to rise, only Hamans use fast food. Just as there are to downsides every thing there are to fast food downsides of course and we need attention to class pay to those. The most import tant these is fast food which is puicly under quickly it is own name. During this time if the ingredients in food are not properly cooked we consume it. Another disadvantage of these foods thet do not provide the body food for with a long time. There fore we need to ourselves prepare from vegetable and fruits in our fields. I came to the conclusion we should not always eat fast food and that we should cook and eat with own our hands. And for the longevity mankind fast food completely must be abandoned.
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-paced world, 65 percent of
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people
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, and as these numbers continue to rise,
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Hamans
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which is
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name. During this time if the ingredients in
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are not
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foods
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thet
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for with a long time.
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and that we should cook and eat with
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our hands. And for the longevity mankind
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should not take

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
182 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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