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Some people believe that its essential to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on preserving old ones

Some people believe that its essential to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on preserving old ones 0B8KQ
Some people believe that its essential to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on preserving old ones Currently, people have forgotten to think about the history of their country and they don’t know what role history plays in their lives and because of this it’s easy for them to replace that places with some modern buildings. However due to the important buildings such as Oxford or Cambridge university we can understand that this historical heritage is very significant for government. They have replaced the inside of these buildings with modern equipment and they spent lots of money to protect that environment. Eventually, in my opinion history can make our culture and because of this it’s really important to respect historical places and appreciate their beauty to protect them
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country and
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due to the
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important
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buildings
such as Oxford or Cambridge university we can understand that this historical heritage is
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very
significant for
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government
. They have replaced the inside of these
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buildings
with modern
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equipment and
they spent lots of money to protect that environment.

Eventually
, in my opinion history can
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make
our culture and
because of this
it’s
really
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to respect historical places and appreciate their beauty to protect them

IELTS essay Some people believe that its essential to construct new buildings rather than wasting money on preserving old ones

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
128 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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