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Some people think that children should learn how advertisements try to persuade them in school. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that children should learn how advertisements try to persuade them in school. MMrqp
Advertising is considered to be the most common method followed by the vast majority of corporations. Although it is an effective marketing tool for the seller to market their product, I believe children should be certainly be made aware of this deceptive means at the very school level. To begin with, the idea of showing the real picture of adverts by the teachers would be definitely of great help. This is mainly because an educational institution is a place where the lessons taught are taken seriously and if the harmful effects of these advertised products are explained at the institution, children are less likely to buy them. Children are commonly seen pestering their parents to buy them Kinderjoy for example, which is advertised by their favourite cartoon character. Ironically, it contains ingredients which may lead to hyperactivity among children; however, being consumed on a large scale due to its popularity. Here, the role of a teacher is critical as they can make them realize about the ill-effects such products may have on them. Similarly, certain expensive products are specially endorsed by famous superheroes which again influences the buying pattern of children. They insist their parents for fulfilling their frivolous demands as parents can see other children also possessing the same article making them helpless. These lessons on differentiating between the product they need and the one they want by not getting carried away by the flashy musical advertisements by the school authorities would not only be advantageous for the children by for the parents too by reducing the burden on their pocket. Therefore, there is a high possibility of making children a wise buyer at a very early age. To conclude, it is unarguably true selling the product by hook or by crook is the strategy of marketing agencies while schools and parents can collectively play an instrumental role in educating their children in making the right buy.
Advertising
is considered
to be the most common method followed by the vast majority of corporations. Although it is an effective marketing tool for the seller to market their
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product
, I believe
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children
should be
certainly
be made
aware of this deceptive means at the
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very
school level.

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begin
with, the
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idea
of showing the real picture of adverts by the teachers would be definitely of great
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help
. This is
mainly
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because
an educational institution is a place where the lessons taught
are taken
seriously
and if the harmful effects of these advertised
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products
are
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explained
at the institution,
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children
are less likely to
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buy
them.
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Children
are
commonly
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seen
pestering their
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parents
to
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buy
them
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Kinderjoy
for example
, which
is advertised
by their
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favourite
cartoon character.
Ironically
, it contains ingredients which may lead to hyperactivity among
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children
;
however
,
being consumed
on a large scale due to its popularity. Here, the role of a teacher is critical as they can
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make
them realize about the ill-effects such
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products
may have on them.

Similarly
, certain expensive
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products
are
specially
endorsed by
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famous
superheroes which again influences the buying pattern of
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children
. They insist their
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parents
for fulfilling their frivolous demands as
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parents
can
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see
other
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children
also
possessing the same article making them helpless. These lessons on differentiating between the
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product
they need and the one they want by not getting carried away by the flashy musical advertisements by the school authorities would not
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only
be advantageous for the
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children
by for the
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parents
too by reducing the burden on their pocket.
Therefore
, there is a high possibility of making
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children
a wise buyer at a
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very
early age.

To conclude
, it is
unarguably
true selling the
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product
by hook or by crook is the strategy of marketing agencies while schools and
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parents
can
collectively
play an instrumental role in educating their
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children
in making the right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should learn how advertisements try to persuade them in school.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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Grammatical Range: 9.0
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