It is often thought that schools ought to teach children to be competitive, while other people feel that the emphasis should be on cooperation. In my opinion, cooperation and teamwork teaches children important skills that help throughout their life.
Several people believe that working as a team helps children develop their interpersonal skills and I agree. Such skills benefit children, as they will have to engage with others during their education, work or in general society and it gives children the confidence to deal with people. Teamwork also helps children understand that each person has strengths and weaknesses and teaches them to leverage each other's strengths while working as a group. Several studies by Harvard University have found out that students with team working skills are more successful at work, as they know how to deliver as a group.
On the other hand, a section of society believes that competitiveness is an important skill that needs to be inculcated in school. Competition motivates students to perform better and score higher marks. This drive also helps students to achieve success both in tertiary education as well as in the job market. Statistics have found that children with competitive skills are more successful in getting university degrees and have higher chances of landing well paid employment early on in their career.
In conclusion, while competition benefits children early on in their lives, I believe cooperation and teamwork skills help children grow and sustain in the long run.
It is
often
thought
that schools ought to teach
children
to be competitive, while other
people
feel that the emphasis should be on cooperation. In my opinion, cooperation and teamwork teaches
children
important
skills
that
help
throughout their life.
Several
people
believe that working as a team
helps
children
develop their interpersonal
skills
and I
agree
. Such
skills
benefit
children
, as they will
have to
engage with others during their education, work or
in general
society and it gives
children
the confidence to deal with
people
. Teamwork
also
helps
children
understand that each person has strengths and weaknesses and teaches them to leverage each other's strengths while working as a group. Several studies by Harvard University have found out that students with team working
skills
are more successful at work, as they know how to deliver as a group.
On the other hand
, a section of society believes that competitiveness is an
important
skill
that needs to
be inculcated
in school. Competition motivates students to perform better and score higher marks. This drive
also
helps
students to achieve success both in tertiary education
as well as
in the job market. Statistics have found that
children
with competitive
skills
are more successful in getting university degrees and have higher chances of landing well paid employment early on in their career.
In conclusion
, while competition benefits
children
early on in their
lives
, I believe cooperation and teamwork
skills
help
children
grow and sustain in the long run.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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