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Some people think that children should be taught history. others think they should be taught science subjects. discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people think that children should be taught history. others think they should be taught science subjects. discuss both views and give your own opinion lq5rX
There is a diversity of opinions between people about what children should study. A part of society opines that pupil should be educated with History while rest prefer that Science subjects should be taught to them. This essay will discuss why former view is righteous since History empowers pupils about their foundations as well as this essay will discuss why second view is justified because Science helps children become better at getting employed at later stage. Eventually, I will give my personal viewpoint. Why the first view is justified because History if it is taught to pupils, it makes them able to understand about their roots. Means to say, they will be educated and aware about who they are, who were their ancestors and how did their country grow which will enrich their candidature in future. For example, if a childis not educated about his history, he is not a completely aware child about his origin and he cannot speak firmly about his foundations. Therefore, teaching him History is going to help him strongly. Why the second view is righteous since teaching the child about science makes him confident to build a career in latest technology. Such as, engineers and scientists are highly needed to innovate and to bring a change in the standards of life. For example, a country having a huge number of technocrats and Science-based professionals can compete effectively and efficiently with the world. Thence, Science subjects if taught to pupils can bring out the scientists within the pupils. This essay has discussed why first viewpoint is justified because History subject educates pupils about their origins and foundations along with it, this essay has also discussed why latter view is righteous as science stream aids children become academically stronger at later stage. Finally, I personally believe that both of the subjects have their own significance and it solely depends on a child where he finds himself better absorbed.
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people
about what children should

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study
. A part of society opines that
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pupil
should
be educated
with
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History
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while


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rest
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prefer
that
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Science
subjects should
be taught
to them. This
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essay
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will


discuss why former
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view
is righteous since
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History
empowers
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pupils
about their

foundations
as well
as this
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essay
will discuss why second
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view
is justified


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because
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Science
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helps
children become better at getting employed at later

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stage
.
Eventually
, I will give my personal viewpoint.

Why the
first
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view
is justified
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because
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History
if it
is taught
to
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pupils
, it
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makes


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them
able to understand about their roots. Means to say, they will be
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educated


and aware about who they are, who were their ancestors and how did their

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country
grow which will enrich their candidature
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in future
.
For example
, if a
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childis
not educated about his
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history
, he is not a completely aware child about
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his


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origin
and he cannot speak
firmly
about his foundations.
Therefore
, teaching

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him
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History
is going to
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help
him
strongly
.

Why the second
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view
is righteous since teaching the child about
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science
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makes


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him
confident to build a career in
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latest
technology. Such as, engineers
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and


scientists are
highly
needed to innovate and to bring a
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change
in the standards

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of
life.
For example
, a country having a huge number of technocrats
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and


Science-based professionals can compete
effectively
and
efficiently
with the

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world
. Thence,
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Science
subjects if taught to
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pupils
can bring out the scientists

within the pupils.

This
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essay
has discussed why
first
viewpoint
is justified
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because
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History
subject

educates
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pupils
about their origins and foundations along with it, this
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essay
has

also
discussed why latter
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view
is righteous as
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science
stream aids children

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become
academically
stronger at later stage.
Finally
, I
personally
believe that

both of the subjects have their
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own
significance and it
solely
depends on a child

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where
he finds himself better absorbed.
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should be taught history. others think they should be taught science subjects. discuss both views and give your own opinion

Essay
  American English
25 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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