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Do young people interested in healthy food

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Although health and fitness are very important for our health. Yet I don't think young people are very interested in their health. because of the high technology products Despite there being lots of ways to choose from. But the young people don't mention that they are not very healthy. For example, some young people use their mobile phones to play games when they use phones a lot, their eyes cannot bear it. If they still watch it, their eyes will hurt. The food they choose is not healthy, either. Most of the food markets have vegetables, meat, and some healthy food. But the young people even don’t pay any attention to that. The fast-food and junk food they eat is unhealthy. Most of that has a lot of oil and salt in it. I think young people don't do any exercise. They just stay at home the whole day and even don't want to move. That makes them lazy. Sometimes when they have to go somewhere, even though it's near their house, they won't walk there.
Although health and fitness are
very
important
for our health.
Yet
I
don't
think
young
people
are
very
interested in their health.
because
of the high technology products

Despite there being lots of ways to choose from.
But
the
young
people
don't
mention that they are not
very
healthy.
For example
,
some
young
people
use
their mobile phones to play games when they
use
phones a lot, their eyes cannot bear it. If they
still
watch
it, their eyes will hurt. The
food
they choose is not healthy, either. Most of the
food
markets have vegetables, meat, and
some
healthy
food
.
But
the
young
people
even don’t pay any attention to that. The
fast
-food and junk
food
they eat is unhealthy. Most of that has
a lot of
oil and salt in it.

I
think
young
people
don't
do any exercise. They
just
stay at home the whole day and even
don't
want to
move
. That
makes
them lazy.
Sometimes
when they
have to
go somewhere,
even though
it's near their
house
, they won't walk there.
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IELTS essay Do young people interested in healthy food

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
176 words
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5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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