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Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion. v.2

Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. v. 2
In the contemporary era, there is heated argument over the issue that, with the rapid growth of universe population is the major issues of providing food items to each person. Although, others say that Genetic modified foods offer a good solution to this serious problem. A Lion's share in its favour, however the rest goes adverse it. The following paragraphs shed light on my personal perspective a long, wide an Opt example. To commence with the first notion, there are myriad things in its favour of GM foods. First and foremost, a genetically modified food helps to especially farmers, to cultivate at any desert because these crops easily grown with the assist of chemicals. Secondly, the farmer earns a big amount of money in a single year after modifying their crops by using the pesticides. They can be grown, their crops easily without any responsibility. As a result, it saves their time for other productive work. For instance, the nation of Europe, whereas, the farmers able to grow rice with a less amount of water it makes their crops grow faster with the aid of pesticides. On the flip side of the coin some critics go against the above mentioned points. However, the GM foods is not good for Masses health because it is not planted in an organic way. Consequently, if a large number of individuals eat GM cuisines. They will be put their lives in danger. Therefore, these types of certain dishes may have less amount of minerals, proteins and vitamins. So, which are the dreadful for human body development. Hammering the last nail, I am of the opinion that it should be helpful to feed the large population. However, the genetic modified food has some demerits, but it is not Overweight, its merits, which are helping in the universe population.
In the contemporary era, there
is heated
argument over the issue that, with the rapid growth of universe population is the major issues of providing
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food
items to each person.
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Although
, others say that Genetic modified
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foods
offer a
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good
solution to this serious problem. A Lion's share in its
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favour
,
however
the rest goes adverse it. The following paragraphs shed light on my personal perspective a long, wide
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an Opt
example.

To commence with the
first
notion, there are myriad things in its
Possible spelling mistake. 'favour' is British English.
favour
of GM
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foods
.
First
and foremost, a
genetically
modified
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food
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
to
especially
farmers, to cultivate at any desert
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because
these
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crops
easily
grown with the assist of chemicals.
Secondly
, the farmer earns a
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big
amount of money in a single year after modifying their
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crops
by using the pesticides. They can
be grown
, their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crops
easily
without any responsibility.
As a result
, it saves their time for other productive work.
For instance
, the nation of Europe, whereas, the farmers able to grow rice with a less amount of water it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
their
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crops
grow faster with the aid of pesticides.

On the flip side of the coin
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some
critics go against the above mentioned points.
However
, the GM
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foods
is not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for Masses health
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because
it is not planted
Consider replacing "in an organic way" with the adverb for "organic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an organic way
.
Consequently
, if
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a large number of
individuals eat GM cuisines. They will
be put
their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
danger
.
Therefore
, these types of certain dishes may have less amount of minerals, proteins and vitamins.
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So
, which are the dreadful for human body development.

Hammering the last nail, I am of the opinion that it should be helpful to feed the large population.
However
, the genetic modified
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
demerits,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it is not Overweight, its merits, which are helping in the universe population.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that children should be taught at school to recycle materials and avoid waste. Other people believe that children should be taught this at home. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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