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the diagrams below shows a company s recruitment process write a report for university lecturer describing this process v.1

the diagrams below shows a company s recruitment process write a report for university lecturer describing this process v. 1
In this modern world, it is an undeniable fact that, sports have a significant portrayal and talented sports personalities are getting a higher remuneration than the remaining professionals. It is opined by some people that, it is acceptable, whereas, in contrast, some others believe that it is not fair. However, being an important mode of entertainment and most of the sports are physically challenging, I strongly agree to the former view. To embark on, sports are considered as a significant means of entertainment. To explain sports play an important appearance to entertain people from the mundane life, and thus help to reduce the stress due to the hectic schedule. For example, cricket is regarded as a major category in sports and skilled and professional cricketers have a crucial performance in refreshing the minds of public. Thus, cricketers have a reliable aspect and their payments are higher than any other jobs. In addition to this, most of the sports activities require physical exertion. To elucidate this, accomplished sports people are trying hard to entertain the audience is through their skills and strenuous work. To exemplify, sports such as cricket, football, wrestling and tennis requires a considerable amount of forceful efforts to satisfy the entertainment needs of the society. Therefore, it is worthy to pay huge amount for this type of sports personalities. Even though, the aforementioned points justifies that, some sports people are receiving a higher remuneration, it is also a fact that there are other people in the community, who plays an equal part in the amelioration of the country. To illustrate, nurses, doctors, militants and police officials have a pivotal character in the advancement of the nation. However, these categories of people are paid less. To conclude, having a part in entertainment which requires rigorous physical activity, the payment to the famous sports personalities are justified. Furthermore, other categories of people such as nurses, doctors male attention and police also had a crucial part in the progress of the country.
In this modern world, it is an undeniable fact that,
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sports
have a significant portrayal and talented
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sports
personalities are getting a higher remuneration than the remaining professionals. It
is opined
by
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some
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people
that, it is acceptable, whereas,
in contrast
,
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some
others believe that it is not
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fair
.
However
, being an
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important
mode of entertainment and most of the
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sports
are
physically
challenging, I
strongly
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agree
to the former view.

To embark on,
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sports
are considered
as a significant means of entertainment. To
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explain
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sports
play an
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important
appearance to entertain
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people
from the mundane life, and
thus
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help
to
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reduce
the
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stress
due to the hectic schedule.
For example
, cricket
is regarded
as a major category in
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sports
and skilled and professional cricketers have a crucial performance in refreshing the minds of public.
Thus
, cricketers have a reliable aspect and their payments are higher than any
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other
jobs.

In addition
to this, most of the
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sports
activities require physical exertion. To elucidate this, accomplished
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sports
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people
are trying
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hard
to entertain the audience is through their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and strenuous work. To exemplify,
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sports
such as cricket, football, wrestling and tennis requires a considerable amount of forceful efforts to satisfy the entertainment needs of the society.
Therefore
, it is worthy to pay huge amount for this type of
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sports
personalities.

Even though
, the aforementioned points justifies that,
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some
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sports
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people
are receiving a higher remuneration, it is
also
a fact that there are
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other
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people
in the community, who plays an equal part in the amelioration of the country. To illustrate, nurses, doctors, militants and police officials have a pivotal character in the advancement of the nation.
However
, these categories of
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people
are paid
less.

To conclude
, having a part in entertainment which requires rigorous physical activity, the payment to the
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famous
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sports
personalities
are justified
.
Furthermore
,
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other
categories of
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people
such as nurses, doctors male attention and police
also
had a crucial part in the progress of the country.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay the diagrams below shows a company s recruitment process write a report for university lecturer describing this process v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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