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Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for y v.4

Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Give reasons for y v. 4
Most governments have to build housing for their citizens. As populations grow more homes are needed, and sometimes the demand for accommodation increases rapidly. If people cannot find places to live0it is a huge worry for them. They do not care about the quality of their housing - they just need somewhere to live. In the past, many buildings were carefully designed, and people could see that their external appearance was important. In my country, some of the most beautiful houses are old ones because they have an interesting shape and the architecture is impressive. Even though they were constructed a long time ago0they are still used and can still cost a lot of money to buy. For this reason, some people believe that homes today should also be well built, using good materials. Although I agree with this0I also feel that poor people might not think it is fair. Some types of building material are much more expensive than others. Architects are also expensive if you use them. We have a lot of apartment blocks in the area where I live, and people want to live in them. They do not think about how much they cost to build. Unfortunately, these buildings may not last very long, and the occupants may have all sorts of problems with the building, which can mean that more homes have to be built. In conclusion, I think that both views are relevant. While city accommodation must be well built so that it does not start to fall down too soon, it should also be affordable and available for people who need it.
Most
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governments
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have to
build housing for their citizens. As populations grow more homes
are needed
, and
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sometimes
the demand for accommodation increases
rapidly
. If
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people
cannot find places to live0it is a huge worry for them. They do not care about the quality of their housing
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they
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just
need somewhere to
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live
.

In the past,
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many
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buildings
were
carefully
designed, and
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people
could
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see
that their external appearance was
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important
. In my country,
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some
of the most
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beautiful
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houses
are
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old
ones
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because
they have an interesting shape and the architecture is impressive.
Even though
they
were constructed
a long time ago0they are
still
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used
and can
still
cost
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a lot of
money to
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buy
.
For this reason
,
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some
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people
believe that homes
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today
should
also
be
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well built
, using
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good
materials.

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Although
I
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agree
with this0I
also
feel that poor
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people
might not
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think
it is
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fair
.
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Some
types of
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building
material are much more expensive than others. Architects are
also
expensive if you
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use
them. We have
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a lot of
apartment blocks in the area where I
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live
, and
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people
want to
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live
in them. They do not
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think
about how much they cost to build. Unfortunately, these
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buildings
may not last
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very
long, and the occupants may have all sorts of problems with the
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building
, which can mean that more homes
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have to
be built
.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that both views are relevant. While city accommodation
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must
be
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well built
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so
that it does not
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start
to fall down too
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soon
, it should
also
be affordable and available for
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people
who need it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Give reasons for y v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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