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Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. v. 1
Accommodation issues are a great concern for almost everyone today, as we see the prices of those properties rising speedily, particularly in large metropolitan cities. While some might argue that the factors of rapid timescales and inexpensiveness should be prioritized, I tend to believe that a building for human habitation ought to last as long as possible. On the one hand, the proponents of providing low-cost fast built accommodation or houses point out that such buildings should not be a burden for every member of society who are directly affected by big events such as unemployment or economic instability. It is true that the cost of living in many urban areas has been extremely high over the past few decades and most citizens would feel more pleasant if they could pay off loans for an affordable house or apartment. For these people, it is much better to own a reasonably priced house rather than be homeless. My uncle Tony, for instance, felt indescribably happy as he saved up enough money for a cheap, nice house purchase on the outskirts of San Francisco city. On the other hand, I believe that such vital properties should be constructed to last as long as possible, which might even be a real saving scheme in the long term. The supporters of this viewpoint highlight that buying cheap accommodation could later end up at a huge cost due to low construction quality as well as high probability of purchasing another same building. For example, a family member of mine regretted buying his initial economical residence due to the fact that he had to do lots of upgrading and maintaining work for his underqualified town house. Thus, it appears that original investment for a decent place to stay could feasibly benefit those who might concern in the long run. In conclusion, it seems to me that initial huge cost for houses or flats could definitely outweigh the short-term benefits of cheaper and quicker accommodations.
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Accommodation
issues are a great concern for almost everyone
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today
, as we
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see
the prices of those properties rising
speedily
,
particularly
in large metropolitan cities. While
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some
might argue that the factors of rapid timescales and inexpensiveness should
be prioritized
, I tend to believe that a building for human habitation ought to last as
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long
as possible.

On the one hand, the proponents of providing low-cost
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fast
built
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accommodation
or
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houses
point out that such buildings should not be a burden for every member of society who are
directly
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affected
by
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big
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events
such as unemployment or economic instability. It is true that the cost of living in
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many
urban areas has been
extremely
high over the past few decades and most citizens would feel more pleasant if they could pay off loans for an affordable
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house
or apartment. For these
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people
, it is much better to
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own
a
reasonably
priced
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house
rather
than be homeless. My uncle Tony,
for instance
, felt
indescribably
happy as he saved up
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enough
money for a
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cheap
, nice
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house
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purchase
on the outskirts of San Francisco city.

On the other hand
, I believe that such vital properties should
be constructed
to last as
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long
as possible, which might even be a real saving scheme in the
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long
term. The supporters of this viewpoint highlight that buying
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cheap
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accommodation
could later
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end
up at a huge cost due to low construction quality
as well
as high probability of purchasing another same building.
For example
, a family member of mine regretted buying his initial economical residence due to the fact that he had to do lots of upgrading and maintaining work for his
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underqualified
town
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house
.
Thus
, it appears that original investment for a decent place to stay could
feasibly
benefit those who might concern in the
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long
run.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that initial huge cost for
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houses
or flats could definitely outweigh the short-term benefits of cheaper and quicker accommodations.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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