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Some people think that automobile has improved modern life. Other think that automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? v.2

Some people think that automobile has improved modern life. Other think that automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? v. 2
In today' s hectic world, in which life has trials and tribulations all people around the globe looking for better life. People have different points of view about lifestyle regarding the trends of modern life. Bearing this fact in mind a question that is a matter of debate a controversial one is whether cars developed modern life or not. Agreement is yet to be reached on this issue; however, I am personally on the belief that nowadays car provides an opportunity for people to live easier and benefits from many advantages of it. In the following paragraph I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons. One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that nowadays automobile play a key role in every single facet of whole societies. One of the most important role, which cars play is helping development of public transportation. Scientifically speaking, vast majorities of people have to commute long distances in order to arrive to their destination in time. In the past, people faced various difficulties and hardly ever got to their works on time due to restriction of public transportation. Delving further into the issue reveals that with the advent of new technologies and the expansion of public transportation such as buses people commute to their destinations easier and as quickly as possible. Indeed, use of new automobiles in transportation not only is beneficial for myriads of people but also beneficial in order to reduce air pollution. A noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistic revealed by recent social research conducted in our country; show that crowds of society revolutionized with the expansion of transportation system because they are able to not only transport people to their destinations but also other goods to different areas. Another reason that is equally important if not more is that automobiles bring many benefits to every society such as job opportunity. Broadly speaking, day in day out with the expansion of population vast majorities of people will looking for decent job. In fact, car firms will provide fertile ground for people to find their ideal job. Not only can people work as an employee in the companies but also can work as a driver. To put it in other word, automobile can bring myriads of advantage in different realm. Indeed, not until automobile has improved can the society progress. However, what I alluded to above cannot overgeneralized to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable benefits it has, indisputably, cars will contribute to a great deal of pollution and traffic jam, which can affect society negatively and prevent people from lead a healthy lifestyle. Nevertheless, it does not make those preceding benefits pale. To wrap it up, due to influential item, automobiles play a key role in all around the world. Contemplating all the aforementioned reason one soon realize that new cars can contribute to expansion of public transportation system. In addition, it will provide people with job opportunity, which is beneficial for people.
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people
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life
.
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People
have
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different
points of view about lifestyle regarding the trends of modern
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life
. Bearing this fact in mind a question
that is
a matter of debate a controversial one is whether
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cars
developed modern
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life
or not. Agreement is
yet
to
be reached
on this issue;
however
, I am
personally
on the belief that nowadays
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car
provides an opportunity for
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people
to
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live
easier and
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benefits
from
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many
advantages of it. In the following paragraph I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.

One compelling reason, lending credence to the stance taken above is that nowadays
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automobile
play a key role in every single facet of whole
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societies
. One of the most
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important
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role
, which
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cars
play is helping development of
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public
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transportation
.
Scientifically
speaking, vast majorities of
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people
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have to
commute long distances in order to arrive to their destination in time. In the past,
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people
faced various difficulties and hardly ever
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got
to their works on time due to restriction of
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public
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transportation
. Delving
further
into the issue reveals that with the advent of new technologies and the
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expansion
of
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public
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transportation
such as buses
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people
commute to their destinations easier and as
quickly
as possible.
Indeed
,
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use
of new
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automobiles
in
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transportation
not
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only
is beneficial for myriads of
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people
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but
also
beneficial in order to
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reduce
air pollution. A noteworthy
refreshingly
intelligible statistic revealed by recent social research conducted in our country;
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show
that crowds of
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society
revolutionized with the
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expansion
of
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transportation
system
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because
they are able to not
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only
transport
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people
to their destinations
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but
also
other
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goods
to
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different
areas.

Another reason
that is
equally
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important
if not more is that
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automobiles
bring
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many
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benefits
to every
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society
such as
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job
opportunity.
Broadly
speaking, day in day out with the
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expansion
of population vast majorities of
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people
will looking for decent
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job
. In fact,
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car
firms will provide fertile ground for
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people
to find their ideal
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job
. Not
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only
can
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people
work as an employee in the
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companies
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but
also
can work as a driver. To put it in other word,
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automobile
can bring myriads of advantage in
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different
realm.
Indeed
, not until
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automobile
has
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improved
can the
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society
progress.
However
, what I alluded to above cannot
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overgeneralized
to all contexts. Alongside with the innumerable
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benefits
it has,
indisputably
,
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cars
will contribute to a great deal of pollution and traffic jam, which can affect
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society
negatively
and
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prevent
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people
from lead a healthy lifestyle.
Nevertheless
, it does not
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make
those preceding
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benefits
pale.

To wrap it up, due to influential item,
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automobiles
play a key role in all around the world. Contemplating all the aforementioned reason one
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soon
realize that new
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cars
can contribute to
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expansion
of
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public
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transportation
system.
In addition
, it will provide
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people
with
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job
opportunity, which is beneficial for
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people
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay Some people think that automobile has improved modern life. Other think that automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
492 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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